(FIC) bury them and be silent

[leftminds]

So, after much whipping from Ederyn, I am stepping out of lurkerage with a minific based on the prompts 'sizzle + electricity + scream'.

I did some research on torture, and this is basically what came out. It's the first thing I've written for quite a while, and never anything like this, so it's a bit experimental. Hope you enjoy it.

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Comments

[black_hairgirl]

Awr... poor Trowa and Duo! Awr... awr... *flinches with them* Yikes.

"It is all very impersonal, very orderly."

I don't know why but this line spoke to me. O-o;
Very well done! It makes me want to know more about the people who are doing that to them! I want to know who that woman saying "Dying is not permitted"!! Waaaahhhh! And Trowa having to jab it at poor Duo-kins. Just terrible!!!

Bravo. T___T

[leftminds]

Thank you! I'll try to get more stuff like this done. ^^

[ederyn]

Yayzors! I love when whipping people actually brings results! Oooh, you're way more evil than me! It's never occurred to me to use one g-boy to torture another. Waaaaaaah! Poor Duo! Poor Trowa! Waaaaaaaaaaahhhh!!! Now I won't sleep tonight, wondering what happened to Trowa after this. Doh! But on a happy note, this brings the total to 3 prompt fics now, so those silly tables I keep posting are actually serving some purpose. Wooties!

[motley_sis]

"Oh Great Table, Without Whom We Are As Naught..." [/Pratchett quite]

[ederyn]

Hee! I love your Pratchett quites!

[motley_sis]

*glares at keyboard* QUOTE, damnit, was that so hard? No? Good.

:)

[motley_sis]

Ye Gods, Leftminds, this is truly chilling. You have managed to paint quite a terror in under a thousand words! The setting is clear; the tension, confusion and despair speak loudly from even just Trowa thinking I thought the war was over. T_T

Poor Tro! After this mindfuck-exercise... I don't think I would want to live after having had to kill someone in such a brutal fashion. So much screaming. *shudders* And poor Duo, having suffered torture only to be tortured some more by his old comrade. Waaaaaaaah!

Very well done! Thanks for letting E whip you into experimenting like this. :D

[leftminds]

Man, I can't be more grateful for the wonderful praise. I was so worried about how this would be recieved! Thanks for the kind words, especially being that I adore your own writings.

[motley_sis]

There's really no need to worry! The way I see it, we are all part of this comm because we like fanfiction with somewhat nastier content - and you are not the only one new at this and still experimenting. That's part of the fun, really, to all try to make things more horrid every time and have a good shudder and a big guffaw about it. ^^

So don't be afraid to experiment more! :D That said, you really did add something we have not seen before - it has been mentioned by others in comments on your story: your idea to put Tro in the position where he has to inflict pain to Duo against his will is marvellous!

And thank you so much for saying you 'adore my own writings'... *flushes quite visibly* ...frankly, I don't really know how to respond to that, seeing as I'm a total n00b at this myself. =^^=

[cozzybob]

Lovelovelovelove!! I love fics that have the boys hurting each other for some reason, rare as they may be. This was rather terrifying. ^^

Excellent! I'm glad E whipped you into posting, I loved it!