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Beauty in the Breakdown (2/3)

Apr 13, 2012 12:55

Title: Beauty in the Breakdown
Author: dj_rocca
Word Count: 2,822
Rating: PG13 (language, medical drug use)
Characters/Pairings: Ruby Lucas, Mr. Gold, Archie Hopper, Pongo, Red, Jiminy
Disclaimer: I do not own "Once Upon A Time", this contains spoilers up to "Red Handed"
Summary: Ever since that moment in the woods, Ruby's life has changed, she thinks she' ( Read more... )

archie hopper, red riding hood, ruby, genre: angst, rating: pg13, fanfiction, jiminy cricket

Comments 5

heron_advocate April 13 2012, 18:56:03 UTC

I really love Ruby's senses being so acute! It's the perfect way to introduce her to her alternate self. Great work!

dj_rocca April 13 2012, 19:14:44 UTC

Thank you so much! Its how I figure she's actually dealing given that's how she found David (and possibly the heart though she doesn't realize it) The next part will take a leap in their relationship and push the line they were helpless to cross. Much angst but it might have a happy ending (which is not known in my works XD)

dreamfairytales April 13 2012, 19:26:28 UTC

You write Ruby really well and I like how you are writing her "wolf senses". Fingers crossed that Archie does not have Peter's fate. :(

dj_rocca April 13 2012, 19:52:59 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm glad you like it and how I have her wolf sense (which is my headcannon to the point I refuse to believe anything else)

And no...well...there is suffering...but there might be a happy ending, which I'm not really known for.

I'm thinking of posting the last part now for you guys ♥

wotnm June 8 2012, 17:08:26 UTC

interesting. This story has a very interesting plot, and I love your twist with Rumple, and I adore how you manage to pull off writing him with that kind of warmth, since mostly in the show we saw his dark side. The one he succumbed to. and you still manage to keep true to the characters, even with your own twists. It is highly enjoyable to read.

There was one thing I noticed, you use to instead of at in places. Like mr. Gold looked to her, instead of at her. Is there any particular reason for that? I'm just being curious. It works with to just as well as it works with at.