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keerawa May 23 2010, 23:35:17 UTC
That's the best Dawson story I've read in a long time, Rhi. That unique no-nonsense approach, a man who recognizes danger and then throws himself in anyway. And yes, John really does make that kind of first impression. Robert Johnson? Really, asshole? *shakes head in disqust*

I'd seen Adam come in from an angle that wasn't really his starting point often enough to recognize it when I saw it.
Oh yeah. Just like that.

I didn't know the casulaty stats for Bravo 9/1. Damn.

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gryphonrhi May 24 2010, 03:05:48 UTC
Thank you! Yeah, everyone I bitched to about John pissing Joe off so fast and she basically said that was John, all right. (Although as far as I can figure it out, the Winchesters take their aliases, half the time, from the last band they heard on the radio, that was still a mistake.) As for Bravo 9/1, yeah, that's what Wikipedia said. I winced, but well, both of Joe's legs and the nickname... I went with it. Thank you, I'm glad you liked it so much!

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em_kellesvig May 23 2010, 23:43:38 UTC
I don't know anything about SPN so I have to take that side of the story almost as original fiction. It doesn't matter, though. Both Joe and John are compelling, dangerous, and somehow very tired. Great read, Rhi!

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gryphonrhi May 24 2010, 03:08:36 UTC
Thanks! Yeah, they were both in dangerous mode while tired. Honestly, I'm impressed that didn't go worse, now that I think about it. Glad you liked it!

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irishkate May 23 2010, 23:51:20 UTC
wow

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gryphonrhi May 24 2010, 03:09:26 UTC
Hopefully that's good!

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irishkate May 24 2010, 10:21:50 UTC
Oh yes very - then tiredness, the tension, the collision of the two worlds...
Very good

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gryphonrhi May 24 2010, 19:58:36 UTC
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it so much. And that so much of what I wanted to put across came across. YAY!

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mackiedockie May 24 2010, 00:48:07 UTC
Excellent story, and I only have a very brief passing exposure to SPN. Both characters resonated within the tale, and *felt* true. Your Joe is awesome. Independent to a fault. Prickly. Guarded. Risk-taking. Want more.

Thank you also for the notes--I really like the delving into the Marine Corps backbone. The Walking Dead absolutely fits, and I agree Joe wasn't with them long--he was still a couple of shades too green after the scene in the hootch. He hadn't yet crisped all his ideals.

One small contribution--my dad, an old 10th Mountain Divisioner, not a Marine, claimed there were three stages of FU--SNAFU, TARFU, AND FUBAR. Three stages may have been too complicado for Marine sensibilities *g*. (TARFU--Things Are Really Fucked Up.)

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mackiedockie May 24 2010, 00:57:10 UTC
Oh, and I loved the Silver John stories as a kid--I have to look them up again!

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gryphonrhi May 24 2010, 03:14:19 UTC
I'm pretty sure Baen books was gonna reissue the short stories last fall. Hope you find them!

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gryphonrhi May 24 2010, 03:13:38 UTC
::amused:: I pretty much know some of the 'everyone knows' stuff about SPN, and the eps with John. Then I got SPN betas to look John over and tell me if it was okay. And Joe was in gloriously snarky mode, wasn't he?

Yeah, I just couldn't buy that Joe had been there even long enough to make corporal, even at wartime rates. ::cheerful:: Thanks, I'll update the notes for that. TARFU is one I hardly ever hear and had completely forgotten.

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pat_t May 24 2010, 03:02:06 UTC
Oh, very nice. I always like stories from Joe's pov. And we never saw enough of John on the show because they focused so much on the younger guys.

Their dialog was brilliant.

Cord really was a bastard though although he got points for saving Joe early on.

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gryphonrhi May 24 2010, 03:17:41 UTC
Thanks, glad you liked it! Man, the sarcasm levels at times.... And yeah, Cord saved his life, but that scene with the raped woman, and Joe having to point out he owed Cord his life, not anyone else's, made me glad Joe didn't spend any more time with him. ::g:: And, I finally finished this!

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