Commentary: Human Landscapes, Part One

[grimorie]

I've always wanted to do a commentary on one of my stories and I looked at Human Landscapes and went, well, what the hell... So, here it is a DVD commentary on Human Landscapes. For anyone interested I have the original story up here.

Just a note before I start, this are my thoughts as I was writing Human Landscapes so I'm not saying that my

Comments

[omnie]

This is really interesting. Man, I love fic commentary.

Before Powerless Stark gave Dani a wide berth but after it he took every opportunity to wheedle Dani

I hadn't noticed that - was Powerless really a turning point for them? Because, if so, that's pretty jerky of Stark.

[grimorie]

It seemed that way, in Tear Asunder he was giving Dani attitude then when Dani electrocuted Charlie he seemed to give her a wide berth. After Powerless, I think for Stark, it humanized Dani for him. That Charlie's partner had flaws and wasn't always so tough.

I think he kind of resents that Dani is Charlie's partner now and that they work well, I bet he didn't expect that. If Dani's disdainful of Stark, Stark is jealous of Dani because she seems to be a better partner than he was and we know Stark is all about making-up to Charlie.

I'm glad the fic commentary works for you:).

[citosol]

didn't know I liked commentary since I started to read yours. ^__^
It's interesting seeing which was the mental process behind a story.
Maybe, one day, I'll do the same with one of my fics.

And, I like Dani-Stark relationship: so territorial! ^^
(obviously because it means that Dani wants Charlie all for her!^_____^ eheh, I can't help: my Creese's side always comes out!)

[grimorie]

Thanks. I like the territorial game Reese and Stark are playing, like they said in the commentary. It's like the old wife and the new wife meeting.

[15lbpurebunny]

Oh, man! MAN! This was great to read! I mean, even though we actually talked about a lot of this stuff together, it was still fascinating to read it.

It just makes the story that much more nuanced and interesting to read the commentary behind the thoughts and how the fiction came to fruition, from your brain onto the page.

"It’s very fortunate that she has Charlie for a partner since Merit Badge Charlie’s been the one to advocate stopping and just keeping still and sometimes that’s all Dani needs to get her equilibrium back."

This, in a nutshell, is them, pretty much.

And, yes, the vanishing eyelashes. Hahahaha.

Can't wait to read part two. And, now I'm inspired to do one of these on a couple of my past chapters. Which fills me with joy and dread. Sigh. See? See what you do????

[grimorie]

Yay! Glad you're enjoying this and I have absolutely no apologies about inspiring to do your own commentaries I would *love* to know the thoughts behind the stories, even though as you said we talked about it.

The vanishing eyelashes truly freak me out.

[15lbpurebunny]

Cool, I may just end up doing that. There are few chapters specifically I think it would lend itself to, the idea of commentary.

Love the new Charlie icon, BTW. Where is that quote from? LOVE IT.

The vanishing eyelashes would probably not be as disarming if they didn't appear, disappear then reappear. Hence, "vanishing."

(We're looking for a constant in eyelash appearance, makeup people.)

[grimorie]

Ooh. Yay for more commentary. As for the new icon I actually got it from otherpictures.

Heee. Yes, constant in eyelash appearance would be nice.