Comments | grangersnape100: One More

a_bees_buzz in grangersnape100

One More

Dec 30, 2007 22:50

Title: One More ( Read more... )

one last challenge, a_bees_buzz, hermione's bad day challenge, hidden agenda challenge

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droxy December 31 2007, 04:09:07 UTC

oh to think of challenges for this. did we do a one more challenge? Hermiones bad day for the first two, out of confomrt zone for some others.

White, milk, or dark chocolate sauce with that Snape?

This is a very nice, extremely cohesive serial. Wonderful lines in there too.

a_bees_buzz December 31 2007, 04:27:34 UTC

I had to look hard for a challenge to fit. I didn't see a "one day", though that would be a good one. (Do let me know if you're ever short of ideas, I have a few I'd like to see.)

What kind of question is that? Dark, of course. Rich, dark, smooth, silken chocolate poured slowly over ...

:D

sbrande December 31 2007, 04:17:57 UTC

Oh this was very well done. Thank you for writing it and giving the DE's more points.

Love Sonia :)

a_bees_buzz December 31 2007, 04:30:16 UTC

You are quite welcome. I do like to mix it up with my writing, so it was time for something with a bit more tension. It's been a little while since I've written anything really dark, though. I'm probably due.

firefly124 December 31 2007, 04:29:00 UTC

Oh, very nice. I love the rhythm of the "one more" ticking clock, the tension between them, and Albus being half wrong as usual. :-)

a_bees_buzz December 31 2007, 04:33:51 UTC

I'm glad you liked the rhythm, since that's where I started. I wasn't actually sure what the story was when I started writing, just that I was going to count down progressively from one day to one minute.

Albus is always half wrong, which is what makes him so incredibly infuriating, because he's also always half right.

gardengrrl13 December 31 2007, 04:33:06 UTC

Wonderful! I love it! Their emotions were so tangible.
Well done!
GG

a_bees_buzz December 31 2007, 04:35:08 UTC

Thanks. I was a bit worried it was all a bit too subtle and poorly defined. I'm glad you saw the feelings.

keladry_lupin December 31 2007, 05:16:27 UTC

He never should have been trusted with her dreams

There's something so perfect about that phrase.

Why wasn’t that enough?

That seems to be the million-Galleon question, doesn't it?

*applause* As always, Buzzy, this is wonderful.

a_bees_buzz December 31 2007, 12:01:15 UTC

*takes a bow* Thank you. A million Galleons, eh? It's a high price. Of course, the answer is worth everything to her.