Comments | grangersnape100: Beautiful Bird, part IV--the conclusion

sshg316 in grangersnape100

Beautiful Bird, part IV--the conclusion

Sep 04, 2009 09:34

Title: Beautiful Bird
Team: The Order
Word Count: 100 x 7
Rating: G
Challenge: Fever
Characters: Hermione, Snape
A/N: This is the final set for Beautiful Bird. I apologize for taking so long, but I still have kids home, and they've been keeping me very busy. Thank you to subvers for beta reading ( Read more... )

fever challenge, sshg316

Comments 41

timestep September 4 2009, 14:52:22 UTC

Very nicely done!

sshg316 September 4 2009, 14:58:05 UTC

Thank you! :D

giraluna07 September 4 2009, 15:27:00 UTC

Very well written, as everything you write. <3

sshg316 September 4 2009, 15:37:02 UTC

Aw, thank you so much! *hugs*

voxangelus September 4 2009, 15:30:17 UTC

Oh, well done. Just enough suspense in each part, too.

I am a total sucker for protectective Daddy!Snape :)

sshg316 September 4 2009, 15:37:51 UTC

Thank you so much, vox! I can never resist Daddy!Snape. LOL ;)

clairvoyant September 4 2009, 17:22:03 UTC

Oh, so lovely. So well done. Take a bow, or several bows.

When I think about one-hundred words, many things come to mind. One-hundred seems like a lot, but it's not. If a drabble is done properly, as you have, Shug, it packs so much emotion, meaning, content and beauty into those few words. Sure, this could have been accomplished in a conventional manner, as a chapter story or a one-shot, but why mess with perfection? You conveyed Hermione's and Severus' anguish and longing with economy of words and perfection. And there's a happy ending to boot.

Bravo!

sshg316 September 8 2009, 15:31:26 UTC

Aw, thank you so much for the love comments! There is something about the drabble/drabble series that just works for me. It's the compactness of emotion, using only the meat of the story ... it's a very good exercise in restraint for me (cuz I tend to get wordy sometimes). ;)

Thanks, again!

septentrion1970 September 4 2009, 17:23:34 UTC

Perfect ending. I guess Severus will still have to deal with his feeling of guilt because he hadn't fought since the beginning, but they're safe!

sshg316 September 8 2009, 15:32:25 UTC

Thank you so much, m'dear! Yes, Severus will feel guilt, but also just a profound relief that he was able to come to his senses and take care of the threat once and for all. Glad you enjoyed this one!