Perfectly Imperfect [Spock/Kirk, R]

Jun 13, 2009 00:59

Title: Perfectly Imperfect [or, The Five Times Spock's Hair was a Distraction (and the one time it was just hilarious)]
Author: igrab
Pairing: Spock/Kirk
Written For: st_xi_kink, for this prompt
Rating: R
Word Count: 1,447
Summary: Kirk is turned on by seeing Spock's hair messed up.
Notes: can anyone explain the difference between R and NC-17? I've never actually ( Read more... )

fandom: star trek, rating: r, pairing: kirk/spock, fanfiction

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tripperfunster June 13 2009, 12:18:58 UTC
Messy Spock hair IS sexy! So is a gaping Jim. (and you understood that perfectly!)

My only concrit would be that the POV seems to shift a bit. It's very subtle, and dammnit, I'm an artist, not a writer, so I'd have trouble pointing out to you exactly where and why, but from 2 to 3 it seems to shift from spock's point of view to Kirks. And then later shifts back again. Again, it's subtle (and perhaps it's the way I'm interpeting it), but it confused me.

Don't take this as a crit on your writing, though. I really enjoyed this fic. It seems longer than it really is (in a good way) and that takes talent! I also love the way you write smut, without being graphic. This is the kind of fic that I'll remember as being graphic. Bravo!

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igrab June 13 2009, 18:11:20 UTC
..yeah, it does. i cannot bring myself to care all too much. as long as it reads semi-okay. |P

i am glad for the crit though ♥

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rockinhamburger June 13 2009, 13:41:36 UTC
Hot fic, bb! Thank you for sharing!

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_profiterole_ June 13 2009, 13:42:32 UTC
That was both hot and adorable! ♥

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purplefluffycat June 13 2009, 14:47:01 UTC
Oh, how wonderful, when I watched the movie I actually remember thinking how sexy Spock would look with his hair tousled!

I liked this line, particularly:

god if it wasn't the hottest fucking thing in the world, seeing him all quivery and shaken and undone. .... Gaaahhhh... ;-)

PurpleFluffyCat x

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luna_moonsilver June 13 2009, 18:20:19 UTC
Ohhhhhhh ... so much love XD

5 is probably my fave, but 4 made me giggle SO MUCH XD

*is so glad you put these on here that she has bookmarked them*

<3~

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