Comments | godofwine: fic | Things You Never Did [john/rodney]

godofwine

fic | Things You Never Did [john/rodney]

Dec 14, 2005 20:45

So finals week is also the the fountain of productivity because procrastination is always preferable to actual work.

Much love to isiscolo for the wonderful beta. All remaining errors are of course my own.

( things you never did )

[f] sga, fic

Comments 146

wesleysgirl December 15 2005, 02:14:16 UTC

*Weeps*

I'm sorry; I don't have anything else right now.

godofwine December 15 2005, 02:52:57 UTC

Aww! *hands you a tissue*

runpunkrun December 15 2005, 02:20:48 UTC

Ack! Sad! Sad! *sniff*

Great POV here, I stopped trying to figure it out after the first section and just let myself get swept along in its music. There were some moments I got confused by the tense, but I suppose that's likely to happen when reading a story in second person...omniscient.

The little moments between Rodney and John were sweet and wonderful, their friendship, the way Atlantis (both the city and the people) misses John, all very simple and important. This is a lovely, heartbreaking story.

godofwine December 15 2005, 02:56:55 UTC

Wow, thank you so much!

I've never done second person before, but it sort of just came to me that way. There's something about the intimacy of it though...

And yeah, I can barely follow my own tense changes, but time is probably my favourite toy of choice.

Anyways, I'm so glad you liked it and thanks for sticking it out!

storm_petrel December 15 2005, 02:23:42 UTC

Oh jesus christ, that hurt. Regret is the worst thing you can ever feel.

godofwine December 15 2005, 02:59:45 UTC

I concur: regret is too final to be easily subsumed.

And thanks for reading!

bluebrocade December 15 2005, 02:30:50 UTC

Ow. Fuck. I'm an atheist and that last line still hurt like a punch to the gut. Powerful piece. ;_;

godofwine December 15 2005, 03:01:59 UTC

I actually wrote half the story with this post-death John's voice, but then I realized that since I'm an atheist too, I don't really believe what that voice. Or at least it's existence.

Anyways, thank you thank you thank you!

shoemaster December 15 2005, 02:33:16 UTC

That was beautiful, I'm crying like the mess I am right now but it was just so... wah.

Not coherent, but I'll be surprised if anyone is after reading this.

godofwine December 15 2005, 03:03:52 UTC

Awww, thank you so much. I was in a mood when I wrote it so...

*offers hugs in consolation*