HSN Exchange Fic: Less Like Friends, for the community

[gleefics_exch]

Title: Less Like Friendship
Rating: R
Pairings/Characters: Mercedes/Quinn
Warnings: Spoilers for all of season one.
Word Count: 5375
Disclaimer: This Glee fanfiction is based upon the television show of the same name. All characters and situations other than my own are sole property of Ryan Murphy Productions and 20th Century Fox Television.
Summary:

Comments

[biruuu]

Whoa. This is amazing.

I love the scene in Quinn's room, with the bible - so realistic and well written. And the little details, like the popsicle melting in the sink, and this:

“See, the bear is made mostly of sucrose,” Santana explains. “And when the sucrose combines with the potassium chlorate, the molecules rearrange themselves to fit each other better, and then you have carbon dioxide, water, and potassium chloride.”

“So they, like, started out as sucrose and potassium chlorate,” Brittany repeats as she writes, “and then when they meet, they share molecules, and turn out different.”

Such an adorable little moment.

I'm also a sucker for these kind of endings in which the last line is a repetition (I don't know if there's a specific name for it :/) so the ending killed me in the best possible way ♥

[cruiscin_lan]

I'm sorry for killing you, biruuu. I never wanted anyone to die.

But I'm glad you enjoyed it, including the gummi bear science lesson. That was a last minute addition and I'm glad I put it in there now!

[anonymous]

This was great! :D

I loved the development of their relationship. Although, I wish there'd been more smut XD. I'd have loved to have read some of this from Mercedes point of view, as well. I loved the poolside discussion and I especially liked reading Mercedes' take on God and gays. :D

It's brilliant! Thank you so much for feeding my new ship. I can't wait to find out who wrote this, because I hope you write more. :)

You wouldn't happen to want to write Queerberry, would you? Just putting it out there for consideration. :D

[cruiscin_lan]

What is Queerberry? I can't figure that one out.

I tried and tried and tried to add more smut, anon, I really did, but I couldn't figure out a way to get it in there without changing the tone or the mood of the story. Perhaps in the next story I write... which, speaking of, I'll also consider your thoughts on Mercedes next time.

[dofuneralscount]

This was beautiful. I'm glad that the smut wasn't heavy because it would have taken away from the gorgeous relationship dymanic you created. This was a true pleasure to read.

[cruiscin_lan]

I'm glad you enjoyed it; thank you so much for reading!

[cruiscin_lan]

I'm so glad you liked it! You seemed to hit on everything I was really trying to accomplish with this story - Quinn's conflicted feelings re: Mercedes and outside pressures - and it's reassuring to know they came across well to at least one reader.

Thank you for reading!

[andbless_mybaby]

This was fantastic.

It might seem like an odd thing to focus on, but I loved your characterization of Judy Fabray. I can very easily see how that behavior would grate on Quinn after she's been away from home. The Goodwill boxes in the basement were a really brutal touch.

I really digged the whole Quinn/Mercedes dynamic, and how organically it seemed to develop. Quinn's discomfort with her crush seemed really believable. It's appropriate that, after all that Quinn's been through and how much she's changed (and man, that was really highlighted by sticking her back in her mother's home), she'd find comfort in the company of the last person she'd ever imagine herself with.

Loved the repetition at the end as well. ♥

[cruiscin_lan]

Judy Fabray was exciting for me to write - I hadn't ever really delved into her character before. She's such a mess in so many ways, but always with that perfect outside appearance; I don't know, she was just really fun to explore.

I'm glad you thought that way about Quinn's crush - "organic" was pretty much exactly what I was going for!