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orphan train

Jul 02, 2008 16:45

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agent_omega July 14 2008, 06:32:53 UTC

Damnit, Gilliebeans... now I'm about ready to cry.

You warned me that the next chapter wasn't going to be pleasant, but I have to say, I didn't expect Mal's reaction. I understand his reasons, but still... all those kids... :'(

I do, however, love the interchanges between Inara and the other members of the crew. The back-and-forth with Jayne at the train station was both humorous and deadly serious, and brings to light a facet of his personality we rarely see. Also, the way you set up the exchange between Inara and Kaylee at the end - knowing that one day, Inara passes on the same wisdom to Shepherd Book - very moving.

A most excellent job... even if it means I have to go nibble on some chocolate now.

Regards,
Omega

gilliebeans July 14 2008, 10:43:06 UTC

Thanks for your words most shiny! After the romanticism of the last chapter - deserted, unspoiled beaches, etc., I thought everyone needed to deal with the fact that life on the frontier can be really rough. It's not beautiful, but sometimes infrastructure and a social safety net take the harsh edge off of life. And, being from different worlds, Inara and Mal would have different reactions to this. Regarding the crew, thanks again! I wanted to give them more to do in this chapter - also, with Jayne, when I was reading about the real orphan trains I found out that Billy the Kid went west on one. Budding psychos, heading out to the frontier - and Jayne would have an eye for trouble :) Enjoy your chocolate :)

isha_libran July 14 2008, 09:28:00 UTC

Wow. I just love your Inara voice, and the argument with Mal was just pitch perfect.

Can't really say much more for the incoherence at the brilliance of this, so: thanks for sharing this, I really enjoyed it. =)

gilliebeans July 14 2008, 10:44:29 UTC

Thank you kindly! I keep thinking what Joss said, their fights are their love scenes, he could watch them fight all day. Me too.

phyrelight July 14 2008, 16:52:56 UTC

Wow! You really have Mal and Inara's pridefulness and stubborness down in this chapter. And, I love how the last lines are an echo/foreshadow of the words between Inara and Book in the pilot.

gilliebeans July 14 2008, 17:32:52 UTC

Thank you very much! Yes, the Inara/Book scene, her face clearly shows that she's learned and seen things that aren't easy for her. That was one of the big inspirations for this story.

charlie_bz July 14 2008, 23:41:11 UTC

Wonderful writing, as usual. Your writing really does stand out. I can't believe the ease with which you craft your words. If I didn't like you so much I'd be jealous!!

The orphan train was such a wonderful way to underline the different world views of Mal and Inara. I think that they are very similiar in many ways but it is the differences that are so interesting!

gilliebeans July 15 2008, 00:00:43 UTC

Thanks for the kind words, and for all your help getting this cake baked! Also, /blush!!!

empirex1020 October 13 2008, 05:30:49 UTC

*gasp* She threw away the shell?!? I didn't even know she HAD a shell! *wibble*
God, these two! It's like one step forward, two steps back. =( I hate this!

Actually, no, I don't. I secretly love it. I slurp angst up with a spoon.

gilliebeans October 13 2008, 10:04:00 UTC

Yes, it's a good thing they are pretty because they are so very irritating. Managed to blow the previous night's cuteness RIGHT out of the water, as it were.