Brilliance - Week 2 entry for Brigits Flame

[giazz_40]

She was big, tall and proud.  Spanning over 20 feet of water she hoisted her proud sails. Her name  "Sariah James II" proudly branded on her keel.  It was off to sea again for the sailors, not for fun or for pleasure, but for an adventure

Comments

[maniccartoonist]

hehe, it was really cute. I liked it a lot!

I'm glad you liked it

[giazz_40]

I thought it had a really cute ending myself...I have a young son myself, so I put his imagination into it.

Re: I'm glad you liked it

[outnorthern]

great, but how do I get him to wash his hair???

Re: I'm glad you liked it

[giazz_40]

I'm working on that one myself! I have a four year old, you?

[createdbyme]

That was great!! :) I like it!! *hugs*

Thanks

[giazz_40]

Thanks, this was the first time I tried to use third person narrative. I think I ended it on a cute note.

G

[jamais_toujours]

That was adorable!

And the captain's story was touching too.

Good job :).

Thanks

[giazz_40]

This was my first time using third person narrative, hopefully I got the mission accomplished!

I really didn't think about it too much, but I like the characters I created.

G

[lacruciverbiste]

that was so cute!! nice work this week. i was totally caught-up in Simon's little fantasy as well. excellent descriptions, and i looove a good pirate story.

good luck this week!

Cheers,
~la cruciverbiste

Thanks

[giazz_40]

I'm glad you liked it. This was my first attempt at third person narrative as well, so I think I did pretty well with it.

G

[lisforliz]

Cute.
Looks like Simon will grow up to be a storyteller. Just like all of us. :]

I'm glad you liked it

[giazz_40]

Actually, my husband is an oral traditional story teller...hmmm