looks like this prompt just got filled.

[ghosted]

Yesss finished this!  I'm not too sure how I feel about it, but thank God it's finished.  ~procrastinates forever orz

Title: Home
Author: illittorate
Rating: G
Verse: Gen I
Characters: Red, Green, Kanto gym leaders
Summary: Red goes on a quest to find his place in the world.

Comments

[lark]

Hmm. This is beautifully written and has a sense of thoughtful, quiet contemplation that's really quite charming. I loved how you took each character and analyzed them so quickly. My only problem is that it's difficult for me to see how this relates to the original prompt. I mean, I see it in bits and flashes, but there's no overarching sense of it. It's strongest in Lt. Surge's section, and in Sabrina's, but in others it seems to be entirely absent (Erika, Blaine

[ghosted]

I wanted to explore what "the quiet world" was for each of the characters but I guess I got sidetracked a little. I do see what you mean.

I agree about Green - he does seem out of place and I only really kept him in because he was in the version of the fic that I'd been carrying around in my head, which isn't reason enough. I think I'll leave the fic as it stands for now and come back to it later.

Thank you for your comment! :)

[ibuberu]

I think I'm going to have to disagree with wanderlark, I felt the prompt emerge very strongly here. Every gym leader with their own quiet world without the need for voices, but their own sanctuary built from their expertise/experience, its lovely to see you develop each and every one of their characters.

And Red himself witnessing all of this yet being unable to escape the quietude of Pallet Town itself is somewhat heartrending, and it makes his departure for Mount Silver all the more believable and emotional, I just -- I loved this entire piece. You did a wonderful job painting each gym leader's worlds, and while I thought the ending felt much to be desired (it seemed to break the uniform atmosphere that was present in the previous 9 parts) it was alright. I think the ending would have been sweeter if you had kept the same dreamy, comtemplative tone and applied it to Red's leaving - instead the ending seemed almost informal in comparison to the rest of the fic ;;

Despite that, this was amazing. You did a wonderful job with the prompt! :D