He then wonders what it’s like to have a soul (or a friend, because he thinks it’s kind of the same thing),
BABY! This hurts my heart so bad!
and the first word Moonsoo learns to say is ‘frostbite’.
This detail made me shiver.
But the girls use him as a starting block, someone to house their affections in without seeking anything more….is letter box is never empty but the girls never leave names, or numbers.
Oh, God, what a great detail. Wow.
Something that must feel a lot like warmth floods his chest.
I am just aching for him.
And of course Hoya would think this way, Hoya and his dance crew and the drama classes he excels in and the sports teams he heads. Even though they’re similar, they’re still not the same. No one is like him and Myungsoo thinks he’s found something even terrifying than wondering where he’d go after he dies.Not that they know this yet but a day after they graduate, the government comes back to claim them, because normal people aren’t born without souls. Normal
( ... )
The ending. Why. Sobs. Myungsoo deserves his happy ending after living years without happiness, okay. I love how their power are ice and fire, just like their personalities. They're like the opposites of each other yet they are meant to be. Only hoya can handle myungsoo's power and vice versa. I really love the part where they test the other's limit out to the point hurting each other but none of them stepping back. I really like your story, the idea is brilliant. Just that the ending is a little bit abrupt? Or it is just me wanting to read more. Nevermind. You did a good job!
i didn't really want to end with a concrete ending because i think it'd be nice for the reader to think about how and what their lives would be like in the adult world and under the government! glad you liked this because i had the idea for fire and ice and didn't want it to get too cliched
i meant to comment ages ago but this is beautiful just like everything else you've written ;-;
He even uses his government codified name in public, calling it a nickname. i like how this simple line shows us how there are two totally different perspectives on the issue, they're so different even though they're both elemental... AND THEN EVERYTHING THAT FOLLOWS THAT UGHhhh i reread this little scene so many times, it gives me shivers. it's just gorgeous.
He stays motionless, until the heat becomes so uncomfortable he has to wiggle out of Hoya’s grip until he’s straddling Hoya, thighs pinning Hoya down. Hoya’s eyes are closed now and the shivering is obvious now. “Tell me to stop,” Myungsoo says quietly.
“I can handle it,” Hoya replies, and pushes Myungsoo until he’s sitting on Hoya’s knees and Hoya sits up and holds Myungsoo in an embrace. Myungsoo is starting to sweat now, the tiniest droplets on his hairline and Hoya repeats it: “Tell me to stop.”all of this ugh ugh ugh uhg sobbing
( ... )
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He then wonders what it’s like to have a soul (or a friend, because he thinks it’s kind of the same thing),
BABY! This hurts my heart so bad!
and the first word Moonsoo learns to say is ‘frostbite’.
This detail made me shiver.
But the girls use him as a starting block, someone to house their affections in without seeking anything more….is letter box is never empty but the girls never leave names, or numbers.
Oh, God, what a great detail. Wow.
Something that must feel a lot like warmth floods his chest.
I am just aching for him.
And of course Hoya would think this way, Hoya and his dance crew and the drama classes he excels in and the sports teams he heads. Even though they’re similar, they’re still not the same. No one is like him and Myungsoo thinks he’s found something even terrifying than wondering where he’d go after he dies.Not that they know this yet but a day after they graduate, the government comes back to claim them, because normal people aren’t born without souls. Normal ( ... )
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I really like your story, the idea is brilliant. Just that the ending is a little bit abrupt? Or it is just me wanting to read more. Nevermind. You did a good job!
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He even uses his government codified name in public, calling it a nickname.
i like how this simple line shows us how there are two totally different perspectives on the issue, they're so different even though they're both elemental... AND THEN EVERYTHING THAT FOLLOWS THAT UGHhhh i reread this little scene so many times, it gives me shivers. it's just gorgeous.
He stays motionless, until the heat becomes so uncomfortable he has to wiggle out of Hoya’s grip until he’s straddling Hoya, thighs pinning Hoya down. Hoya’s eyes are closed now and the shivering is obvious now. “Tell me to stop,” Myungsoo says quietly.
“I can handle it,” Hoya replies, and pushes Myungsoo until he’s sitting on Hoya’s knees and Hoya sits up and holds Myungsoo in an embrace. Myungsoo is starting to sweat now, the tiniest droplets on his hairline and Hoya repeats it: “Tell me to stop.”all of this ugh ugh ugh uhg sobbing ( ... )
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