Comments | getyourtoaster: last part in the series, finally

projectcyborg in getyourtoaster

last part in the series, finally

Mar 01, 2008 10:20

Title: Arachne into a Spider [5/5]
Prompt: Roslin/Tory, recognition
Rating: NC-17
Spoilers: through "Crossroads"
A/N: titles from Ovid's Metamorphoses (1717 translation, Pallas=Athena). I have a thesaurus addiction, as you may have noticed; I banned myself from the thesaurus while writing this fic. It helped. mandysbitch, my rock, did the rest.
Summary: OTP 2 ( Read more... )

p:laura/tory, by:projectjulie, 7:battle, r:nc17, .story

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projectcyborg March 18 2008, 03:29:22 UTC

hee. I had the ending written long before I sat down to the fic. I often compose first and last lines before I can begin. this one was, of course, inspired by your "money shot" fic! so thank you. I do agree it's just perfect. >:)

liverpool_ruth March 2 2008, 10:14:04 UTC

Oh... how I wondered what had happened to the last part of this story,.... and I was hoping for Tory using Kara's toy with Laura..... mmm... am all weak and wobbly now.... this is so very lovely and hot..... am all idiotically smiley now.....

this bit especially jumps out...
She's close, luminous and shaking. It's true: there's nothing I want more than to watch her come. I wedge my fingers between us, curling them against the slip-slide of her clit. She goes rigid, claps a hand over her mouth to catch the scream. Almost gone myself, I reach up and squeeze her throat. "Look at me," I say. Her gaze is searing. Choking and trembling, she's pure life, and I want to leech her into me. I know she'd take the cancer from me, if she could.

ah.... falls into limp mush... and lovely sexy Laura dreams....

thank you ever so much... for sharing this... and the whole series. :)
Ruth

projectcyborg March 18 2008, 17:25:14 UTC

I was hoping for Tory using Kara's toy with Laura

you're a savvy reader! the structure of the series certainly called for that as the grand finale. it was so satisfying to write, and I'm happy it had a similar effect on you as audience! thank you for feedbacking so faithfully.

mariannesquee March 6 2008, 08:36:42 UTC

Ah, seeing Roslin go to Tory at the end, it's so unusual in a fic, and so lovely.
I could never really think of a way for Roslin to instigate teh sex with Tory without it being totally out of character; butthe idea her looking in on Tory, particularly after what happened with Billy, is perfect
The "Some days I hate her for it," "the way she looks at me, like my body is a delicacy and not a disease" explains it well too, it's showing that this the feelings comes-and-goes for Roslin, but Tory can't help but want Roslin all the freaking time; but without it turning into some sub/dom situation that it sometimes does in fic!

Ahhh. In a word; awesome-o-sarous.

projectcyborg March 18 2008, 16:58:30 UTC

in this series as a whole, I tried to take Roslin's self-enforced celibacy (Laura, the way Mary describes her) seriously -- and then ask what it would really take for her to break her own rule. probably different fans would answer that question differently, YMMV, but I'm glad to hear my version worked for you! the dramatic inequality between them is one of my very favorite things about this pairing, but also the fact that it's much more complicated than Roslin having all the power. Tory's no pushover! so those exchanges, the way Laura does get something irresistible from Tory, even if it's not pretty or nice or irreplaceable, were really fun to write. thanks for the comment!