Card Castle (Make Your Own Fate) by ChemFishee / Ianto/Suzie / NC-17 / Round #1

[chemfishee]

Title: Card Castle (Make Your Own Fate)
Author: chemfishee
Pairing: Ianto/Suzie, mentions of Jack/Suzie and Jack/Ianto
Rating: NC-17
For: babel
Elements: Ianto/Suzie, unhealthy obsessions, rough sex
Thanks: To the stupendous kennedy_unknown, who broke the beta land speed record and didn’t blink twice when I said I was writing this
Summary: They’re not as different as she

Comments

[tanisafan]

Wow, Chem. You said this wasn't what you'd wanted to write and it definitely wasn't what I was expecting of the Ianto/Suzie fic, but that doesn't make me love it any less.

I really love your portrayal of Suzie. The way she feels free at night, and her jealousy when the attention is drawn away from her... It all seems very fitting. I especially love this:
When it was gone, Suzie realised the light had only been Jack’s reflection. Never her.

Oh and I really liked that somehow, this is the point where Suzie begins to feel something moving in the dark.
And then that ending? Kills me dead.

I'm really glad there will be more for this pairing, and the fact that I am surprises even me ;)!

[chemfishee]

Wow, Tanni. Yet another review that just leaves me in awe. The one that I'd been talking about that the snippet posted last week was from stalled out on me, sadly. I think that once I get that figured out, the intended piece can come together. At the very least, there's something to work on during the doom.

She's growing on me, to the point that the empathy I've got for her has someone concerned. There's something about it...

I have to admit, I wanted an ending with a kick. Trying to show just how fucked the whole team is and how they bring about each other's destruction. Or something like that.

Dude! Yay! That fills me with so much glee. And trepidation. Damn phenomenal prompts!

And you used the icon.

[tanisafan]

Yay, looking forward to that! I'm trying not to write at all during the doom because it will undoubtedly end up eating my brain, but I plan to finish the drabbles, at least. Stuff like that can be written in my breaks ;).

And heh, it's one of the pretty TW icons I kept. I'm over it now, but going from 105 to 35 icons was real bitch to decide ;).

[chemfishee]

Oh, I know I'm going to regret the decision. But there has to be some distraction from staring at equations and formulas and remembering oxidation potentials and... Blah. I'm rambling. I demand my drabbles! Ahem.

The great downsizing. That must've been tough.

[chemfishee]

Squee away. I'm told it's good for the soul. I'm so incredibly glad that I got to be the first one you read. And that you like it. Yay!

I do think there could've been something between the two of them if they wouldn't have let themselves get in the way. At the very least, they were probably a lot more alike than either wanted to admit.

Wow. This was definitely not the story I intended to write for this prompt. It just sort of fell out of the computer while I was cursing at the larger fic that refused to cooperate. However, I'm positively thrilled that you enjoyed it. Thanks so much for the phenomenal prompt that's definitely taken over my brain for the past month and continues to do so. And thank you for the wonderful review.

[invisible_lift]

I'm having trouble putting words together here, but I think the thing I like best about this piece is how human they are. How they're fumbling, miserable, angular people. I like the Ianto you've put together here, and Suzie's desperation.

Damn.

[chemfishee]

That's a positively lovely comment. The desperate humanity of all the characters definitely drew me to this wonderful show and fandom. To hear that you liked that aspect fills me with glee and happiness. Thank you!

[moira_fae11]

Chem, this is absolutely lovely. THe despair, their humanity, their loneliness is almost palpable. You've done a beautiful job with a very tricky pairing. Well done you!

And I love the end. Ianto, if only you knew what you've begun! ;D

[chemfishee]

Thank you very much. I'm glad that all of the emotionality came through. Oh, Torchwood! How we love you for the fallibility of your characters!

And a double thanks for that. Trust Ianto to think he's doing the right thing.

[kennedy_unknown]

Dude, you know how much I was floored by this fic. That ending is an absolute killer. And you make the pairing so realistic and believable, two incredibly fucked-up people with secrets tearing them apart. Yowsers.

[chemfishee]

Eeeeh! I do know. I also promise that I've not yet reached the Frankenstein level. Maybe soon... ;D

You know that's what I &hearts about this show. There will be more!

[kennedy_unknown]

Chem will destroy the universe! And finally the Who community will be crying out for Martha Jones.

I know. I'm starting to feel apprehensive about the second season and how much they can make them suffer. Although Ms. Jones will make me happy.

[chemfishee]

It's all part of my plan!

No apprehension allowed, K! They're Torchwood. Outside the government, beyond the UN, yadda yadda yadda. Thus, they're used to torture. And then Martha will save them from themselves. Because that's what she does.