Comments | gen_storyteller: The Right Path

secondalto in gen_storyteller

The Right Path

Jan 27, 2007 11:38

Rating: PG-13
Characters: Wesley, Lorne
Summary-Wesley returns to Caritas
Spoilers-Up to S3 of BTVS, ATS: Redefinition
Disclaimer: Joss and all the others own them, I just borrow for fun
Feedback: equals happy muse, happy muse equals more stories
Author's Note: This was my first gen fic, one of the few I've written. It was also my first attempt at ( Read more... )

ats: s2, drama, lorne, wesley, ficlet, author: secondalto

Comments 11

hesadevil January 27 2007, 18:00:32 UTC

Lovely. You've Lorne down to a 'T' and Wesley with all his insecurity facing up to his destiny and accepting who he is.

Welcome aboard and thank you for a fine first entry.

secondalto January 27 2007, 19:12:35 UTC

You've Lorne down to a 'T'

*blinks* Really? Wow. I always worry so about voies and I think Lorne's is one of the most unique in the Buffyverse, so thank you.

I look forward to hopefully contributing more.

hesadevil January 27 2007, 19:18:14 UTC

You've caught the rhythm of his speech. He tends to use short phrases and I can hear him as I read this. I find writing Lorne difficult because I'm English and don't have an ear for American phraseology or language. I have to consult the Buffyverse Dialogue Database for all the American characters.

shinodabear January 27 2007, 18:12:07 UTC

I love the little boost of confidence that Lorne gives Wes. Nicely written. Thank you for posting.

secondalto January 27 2007, 19:11:04 UTC

Thank you, and glad to contribute to a fine new community.

deborahw37 January 27 2007, 20:35:16 UTC

Oh that's perfect . But I can't help wondering if Wes would have needed a few nore drinks had he known just how dark the path was going to get

secondalto January 27 2007, 20:36:20 UTC

Thank you. Yes, I can picture him downing several more.

spikendru January 27 2007, 21:32:10 UTC

This was wonderful! Lorne is rather difficult to write, and you've captured him perfectly in this. And I love your Wesley; of course he would immediately confess to being fired as a Watcher and take all the blame for Buffy's and Faith's choices on himself. I loved that he accepted Lorne's reading and decided he wasn't a failure after all - now he can go on to continue to keep AI going and make the hard choices.

secondalto January 27 2007, 21:47:04 UTC

Thank you! I'm so happy that Lorne turned out well. Maybe I should try him again sometime.

xlivvielockex February 4 2007, 23:11:46 UTC

Great work. You really did get Lorne's voice right on with this and nailed the conflict/insecurity that Wes must have been feeling. I could have seen this scene happening, and that to me, is the sign of a really great piece of fanfiction.

secondalto February 4 2007, 23:13:40 UTC

Wow. *blushes* Thank you.