China drabble

[spuffyduds]

TITLE: Crunch
Summary: A drabble set shortly post-Not Fade Away.
Rating:PG.
Warnings/Notes: Done for this week's "China/Chinese" prompt at open_on_sundayThe slayers have spread out, walking a grid, checking every building, cleaning out what’s left of LA. And as Tori steps down into a basement, there’s a crunch under her boot. She looks down to see china

Comments

[myfeetshowit]

What a clever twist on the prompt. Poor Dru, though!

[spuffyduds]

Oh, yes--nobody wants to see their children go before them! Thanks.

[scarlettlily]

Very interesting!

[spuffyduds]

Thank you!

[ozma914]

A fitting and not overly surprising end to Miss Edith's mistress ... but what struck me was that in that short space, I came to feel like I knew a lot about Tori! Great moment.

[spuffyduds]

Well, cool! Always fun if I can accomplish an introduction in a drabble. Thanks!

[hesadevil]

I like your use of the present tense. It pulls us into Tori's POV straight away. There's also a symmetry in the construction of the drabble, beginning and ending with the focus on that glass eye.

Nice work.

[spuffyduds]

Thank you! I appreciate the thoughtful feedback... Doll eyes are just CREEPY.