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Wandering Thoughts

Feb 15, 2009 17:34

Title: Wandering Thoughts
Author: gee_tarded
Pairing: None
Rating: R
Summary: Dom writes his thoughts on a journal.
Disclaimer: I do not own Dominic Howard. And this never happened.
Author's Note: This is un-beta, if you see grammar mistakes I do apologize for it immensely or if this doesn't make sense at all. This is unplanned, just listening to PromoCD ( Read more... )

wandering thoughts, belldom, museslash

Comments 40

deepseabed February 15 2009, 11:21:55 UTC

It was painful.
But I like to read painful stories like this. I liked it.

And I'll agree with Dom, completely.

gee_tarded February 15 2009, 11:29:45 UTC

Thank you! Glad you like them :)

ammee_bliss February 15 2009, 11:28:11 UTC

OK, so seriously the last paragraph is just beautiful.
Or more than beautiful, as it is an understatement. ;)

Keep up the good work, that was very good. :)

gee_tarded February 15 2009, 11:31:41 UTC

Thank you! I like the last paragraph as well. *smiles ear to ear*

ammee_bliss February 15 2009, 11:37:41 UTC

:) You're welcome.

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gee_tarded February 15 2009, 12:55:43 UTC

Thank you so much! I love that last paragraph, my fave actually. Who wouldn't melt we're talking about Matt, put your shoes on Dom *sigh* *daydreams* :)

stefanyeah February 15 2009, 12:52:17 UTC

That's good. :)

P.S.: Found sme mistakes. :P
*shuffles-away*

gee_tarded February 15 2009, 12:58:14 UTC

Either I know you too well or my instincts were right that you're the person to spot some misakes and tell it to me. :p Thanks for commenting thought. :)

Care to point it out?

stefanyeah February 15 2009, 13:10:25 UTC

murple
I usually refrain from pointing them out, but you mentioned there might be some in.

Even when my eyes are close
Should be closed

I love him the first day I laid my eyes on him
I love him since the first day I laid my eyes on him

my situation far more worst than I’ve thought of but things have changed,
Should be worse. you need the compartive here, not the superlative.
And I think the 'of' can be dropped, too. Not too sure about it though.

He dragged us into this and made it real which I am more grateful of.
Here I would use the superlative. Because there's nothing mentioned he's less grateful of.

So all in all not so many big mistakes I say. Maybe forgot a letter there, a word here. Happens to me all the time…

gee_tarded February 15 2009, 13:13:03 UTC

*shuffles away*

Wow too many mistakes indeed. *hides in shame*

Thread 14

purestarlove February 15 2009, 13:12:37 UTC

Heartbreaking but oh so lovely, such genuine feelings.

gee_tarded February 15 2009, 13:15:02 UTC

Thanks for commenting. :)