sga fic: blinking in the sun

[minnow1212]

Title: Blinking in the Sun
Author: minnow1212
Remix of: Black Light in a Shady Alien Motel Room by raisintorte
Characters: Teyla-centric. Also Kanan, Ronon, John, Rodney
Timeline: Say six months to a year after episode 5.3, Broken Ties
Word count: ~2,000
Summary: Their trading partners made them pretend to do it. Again.

Comments

[raisintorte]

Wow! Seriously - WOW.

I'm just kinda in awe that you could take a silly little story about fake sex and worshiping at altars and make into something so thoughtful and understated.

I loved that you turned it around and made it about Teyla and set it in the future with Kanan and Torrin. It just worked and was completely unexpected.

This is the classier cousin to my story. :-)

[minnow1212]

Belatedly, thank you so much! I'm really, really glad it worked for you.

By the way, I really enjoyed going through your stories for remix--it was really cool how many different characters and genres you've written. It's weird, because I didn't quite start off with this story, although it made me grin a lot. But I bounced among a few other stories (and got about 750 words into a remix of the Teyla/Bates story before realizing I saying anything you hadn't already said in the orignal), with the matter-of-fact demystication of AMTDI in Black Light apparently growing in the back of my mind all the time...

[_minxy_]

Oh, that's lovely. I adore the detail of Teyla closing her eyes, that ritual sex is full of humor and devoid of laughter, that John and Rodney take a long time to catch on (or maybe not, maybe they're communicating in that bass ackwards way they have). I love Teyla's memories of Athosians, and it was such a pleasant surprise to remember that Kanan knew the same people, didn't need explanations of who was who. It's something Teyla has not had for such a long time.

And Elizabeth, eeee! That early negotiation is lovely. I adore how Teyla gauges friendship and uses it to better negotiate, in such an open and wonderful way. Beautiful skill you've drawn her with. Lovely.

[minnow1212]

Thank you! Teyla closing her eyes was in the original, and I really liked that detail, so...it showed up again. *g*

[incidental_fire]

Very cool. I loved all of the backstory and discussion about what those rituals actually mean. The peek into Teyla's head and history were very nicely done.

[minnow1212]

Thank you!

[bluflamingo]

I haven't read the original - off to do it now - but I loved this regardless, especially Teyla standing up for her people with Elizabeth, and how clearly she distinguishes between who she is and who she fakes being sometimes (and that Meleha had a wife)

[minnow1212]

Thank you! I'm glad it stood on its own for you :)

[ceitie]

I love the image of Teyla and Ronon laughing their asses off about their fake sex script, and Teyla and Elizabeth's negoatiation, and Teyla coming home at the end of the day to her family.

[minnow1212]

Thank you! Ronon and Teyla seem to have such a solid friendship, and I like to imagine them laughing together.