[fic] We Were The More Deceived 2/? (The 4400; Shawn/Kyle, Maia; PG-13)

[garnettrees]

NOTES: Wow-- this is the second chapter of 'We Were The More Deceived'. When I started it, it was July 2007. The current (and-- though we didn't know it then-- final season of The 4400) hadn't finished airing, and I'd chosen to set the story over five years in the future because things were changing so rapidly from episode to episode. I wrote about

Comments

[anonymous]

I really, really like this. I wish I had something more concrete to say in response, but it's hard for me to pin down this story -- there's so much I want to know. Maybe it makes me sound shallow, but my favorite part is the flashback, the boys in a simpler time.

[minttown1]

Um, weird. That was me (Amber) commenting, but apparently there are some issues with my staying logged in. Blah.

[garnettrees]

Thank you so, so much for the sweet comment. I feel bad it took me so long to get back to you-- it's been a crazy couple of weeks. Hopefully, I'll be able to fill in more of the blanks when I churn out another part (you know, after the next ice age ^^;), but I'm glad you like the sort despite some of the missing pieces. And I don't think it makes you sound shallow to like the flashback-- I'm happy it communicated Kyle's yearing for his youth and, as you said, 'a simpler time'.

Thanks again, darling!
-Meredith

[fairquest]

Seeing that this story hasn't been updated is like seeing the director's chair, close-up, right in front of a newly finished set. You can't see the beauty of the world she has created, but you have faith in her ability once you see the name emblazoned on that chair. I apologize for the ridiculous metaphor, but I hope you understand what I mean. I so badly want to know where this story goes, what's happened to Shawn, and how everything went so wrong. Please consider writing more soon!

[sirnonenath]

This story is so promising; please don't give up on it.

I love that you just drop us into the setting without explaining exactly what's happened to everyone. I adore how you've aged Maia with hints of her child-like self overlaid with a new harder edge. And, of course, the Shawn-Kyle dynamic was always my favorite in the show so this story is of course a win for me.

Any chance you'll continue this? *begs*

[eirenical]

How did I never know you'd written a part 2 to this story?? D:

Well, I know now and I read it and it's brilliant. Maia. ;_; Oh, that poor girl. She's been seeing too much for so long. :( I love how you've handled her character here. How she's almost an ethereal wisp of a person, but at the same time so strong and determined. It shows the dichotomy of her character perfectly.

And the flashes of Kyle's thoughts about Shawn... ;_; Love. It. So poignant, so beautiful.

Only... now that I've had this bit, I want more. I want to know what happened to Shawn and what's going to happen when Kyle rescues him (because he will, right? *wobble eyes*), and I'd love to know what caused all this mess to begin with. I hope you haven't abandoned this story altogether. It may be my favorite 4400 fanfic ever. ^_^