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dancingdragon3 February 7 2012, 04:11:10 UTC
Poor Sylar. Him presenting himself is just disturbing. I cant wait to read Sylar's next pov. I especially hope for some explanation of all the little touches there near the end.

Even though I've read this, I was still anxious that Sylar was gonna freak out and hit Peter again. Peter is being very brave here, putting himself out there. I would be afraid to get naked and into bed with Sylar at this point. And he's still trying to do things he's not ready for! When will he ever learn? Thank goodness he has Peter to hold him back.

Encouraged, Sylar pressed Peter back with the force of his pursuit, engulfing Peter's mouth with his own, tasting him and drinking him in. Oh God, Peter thought, get on top of me, Sylar. Come on … He gripped him again a few times, stoking Sylar's ardor and slid his hand behind Sylar's shoulder, trying to urge him forward and onto him. Come on, baby, it's okay.This part is so hot and always puts me in flames. I want so bad for Sylar to just get on top of Peter already dammit! I so hope that in some future ( ... )

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game_byrd February 7 2012, 04:17:06 UTC
Yay Characters! Yay Conflict! What's this story need now? CONCLUSION!!!

Consummation would work too. :D

I don't have the kids next weekend, so hopefully I can hammer out something then. I have this to finish, and that sharp_teeth prompt. Plus whatever other plot bunnies I can't fend off. What was that fantasy that was bothering me today? Oh yeah. Peter had hurt himself in the Wall Verse and Sylar dragged him back to his (Sylar's) apartment and was playing nurse maid to him. Peter became somewhat conscious, relieving Sylar, and reached out to grab at him. Sylar let Peter paw him, until Peter found Sylar's hand and squeezed it, saying, "Thank you," before falling back asleep/lapsing into unconsciousness again.

But I couldn't work out an injury that would leave Peter intermittently conscious, yet was safe to move from the injury site. I won't write that. Tomorrow I'm sure I'll have a new one. Hopefully it will involve this story!

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dancingdragon3 February 7 2012, 04:35:24 UTC
Well, if you need ideas, I think they really need to talk again. Sylar need to fess up to something! Whatever is going on with him needs to be addressed in some fashion, IMO. Even if it's just being scared of gay sex.

And I think you can write an injury like that. Sylar wouldn't know not to move him and its not like there would be an ambulance on the way. He couldn't just leave him on the street. Peter could just have another concussion from a hit on the head or something. It would be hilarious to see Sylar trying to nurse Peter. He'd be all thumbs. I like when you write endearing!Sylar. It brings out the can't resist!Peter. Sigh.

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cobra_fbr February 7 2012, 06:23:47 UTC
Awww! The ending is warm and fuzzy and definitely warrants snuggles, even though I agree wholeheartedly with dancingdragon3. I'm still, like, agh! Sylar, don't hit Peter, be careful, don't do anything stupid! *hides under covers* but it's written so well, I must continue reading!!!!!!!!!!

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game_byrd February 7 2012, 12:38:46 UTC
Awesome! I must continue writing, then!

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lornrocks February 7 2012, 07:10:58 UTC
Awwwwww. <3

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game_byrd February 7 2012, 12:38:56 UTC
:D

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game_byrd February 7 2012, 12:38:02 UTC
Yes, that makes total sense! Poor Sylar really is "damaged goods" here.

This is the first story I've written where people are trying to give advice/talk to the characters. That's really cool!

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asmodesgold February 10 2012, 16:06:11 UTC
*Bubbly* You're reinforcing my belief that these two are perfect for each other! ^.^

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game_byrd February 10 2012, 23:13:05 UTC
Thanks! I hope to finish the next chapter tonight or tomorrow. Sunday at the latest!

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