Wall Verse Chapter 12, Good Night Until It Be Morrow

[game_byrd]

Title: Good Night Until It Be Morrow
Characters: Peter/Sylar
Rating: PG
Warnings: None
Word count: ~2,800
Setting: The Wall, part of the series Wall Verse
Summary: After Sylar knocked Peter out, Peter wakes and hides; Sylar gloats, then begins to doubt.

Comments

[lornrocks]

I'm going to be very sad if this is where you leave off for a while. I'll miss you around, actually. :(

[game_byrd]

Hey! It doesn't mean I'm going to stop publishing stuff! Just that I won't be publishing the end of *this* right away!

(Or do you mean you're going to boycott me until I post more of this one? That's ... flattering, and scary. D: )

I have quite a bit more written, but it went into emotional territory that was uncomfortable for me to write and I want to calm down about that before publishing. Also, it's possible I'll change my mind and scrap whole chapters, which is tough to do if I've already published them.

I'm going to move on to other writing projects for the time being and let this one chill on the back burner for a bit.

[lornrocks]

Nah, I don't mean to boycott you, I just misread your comment, ha ha.

[game_byrd]

Okay, thanks! I've written something today that I can post for all. It's naughty.

[vivihanna]

I agree with lornrocks, very sad indeed. :(

Poor Peter, but I can relate to Sylar's feelings. I'm always paranoid when people try to be nice to me. This is such an excellent story, I really love it. :)

[game_byrd]

Yeah, they're kind of immovable object and irresistable force - Peter and Sylar. Sylar can't get his mind around the idea that someone would love him, or even admit to himself that he's falling for/has fallen for Peter.

There will be more of this story, but it might be a while. I've prioritized other projects ahead of this. For the last month I've been working on things I wasn't posting - the big boom, this plot arc in Wall Verse Shorts and Shattered Salvation (which is published on FFN). I'll get back to something I can post on LJ.

[punk4life1315]

Sylar go find him! Go find him now! And apologize and make up and stuff!!!

[game_byrd]

Yeah, Sylar's a big dork in this story. Usually he's cruelly put-upon and misunderstood. He's still pretty misunderstood here, but I actually took things a step further and had Sylar be the bad guy. I don't do that very often.

[dancingdragon3]

Why the hell was I fucking him? All the closeness and trust and intimacy they'd built up in the weeks prior was erased and obliterated.

This is so sad. And completely realistic that Peter would be feeling this way. And did I mention, sad?

And Sylar rationalizations are scary in how...plausible they sound. When you look at it from his POV, obviously. You've written this so well.

Glad to see more worry on Sylar's part.

[game_byrd]

In this story, I really enjoyed swapping back and forth on the POV. As a writing exercise, I suggest it. It helped me crystallize what was going on with the other character's thoughts. When I write normally, from one POV, I have a pretty good idea of what's going through the mind of other characters but I don't always work it out explicitly. These were fun because I *had* to be explicit.

Also, I liked the opportunity to show the thought process from both sides, because without that, I think that given how emotionally intense this all was, the non-POV character would have looked indecipherable. It's like all the questions I got on Handle with Care asking what was going through Sylar's head, what his motivations were - if you stick to one POV character, the reader is as much in the dark as that character about the other characters. That can serve a story purpose (like in Handle with Care), but I liked the chance to blow that out of the water here.

[cobra_fbr]

Dammit, Sylar! Just grasping at straws... *grumble* you get your butt back up there and find Peter!

[game_byrd]

Hee!

I do that at TV shows sometimes, too - try to suggest to the characters what they *really* ought to be doing! Silly characters. They never listen!