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gaiafaye

Heroes fic: How You Sleep (4/12?)

Jan 17, 2011 21:40

Title: How You Sleep - Chapter 4: Coming Clean in a Mud Pit (4/12?)
Series: Heroes
Pairing: Mylar
Rating: R
Warnings: Mpreg! BS science! Fairly dark! Consent issues!
Summary: After being doused with the complete formula, Mohinder copes with a lingering side effect as he and everyone around him try to rebuild their lives and their trust.
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Comments 11

starrdust411 January 18 2011, 05:20:37 UTC

Damn you! I should be asleep right now but when I saw this update I just had to drop everything and read it!

I like how Peter's "always look on the bright side" approach to life hasn't been at all dampened by Mohinder's "the world is shit" out look. Nope, Peter's just going to keep barfing rainbows at him until Momo accepts his list of potential baby names.

Also, I was surprised that he actually got Mohinder to confess that Sylar's the dad. I honestly thought that'd be kept a secret throughout the story. I'm anxious to see how this revelation with effect things between Peter & Mohinder (since it obviously hasn't effect Mohinder's view on his pregnancy).

gaiafaye January 18 2011, 06:03:26 UTC

You'll never get sleep as long as I'm around! mwahahaha

Hey, if Peter wasn't around, this'd just be a story of Mohinder angsting and angstfic just isn't as entertaining as it used to be for me.

Mohinder telling Peter was a way of relieving some of the pressure of having such a terrible secret. Yeah, he's still having trouble accepting the baby, but soon the confession will be a part of that final acceptance.

Was this grueling to get through, btw? I kept looking for things to cut out, or some place to split it into two parts, but I couldn't do it. :\

starrdust411 January 19 2011, 02:05:51 UTC

You don't want to do straight angst anymore!? :O What happened!?

Well, I didn't feel like there were any passages that were unnecessary or dragged, although I was rushing when I read this so the only problem I ran into was how long it was lol. I'll have to reread it later to give you a better answer :P

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gaiafaye January 18 2011, 22:39:22 UTC

Haha, I actively tried to make the flashback less hot considering what the story is about, but considering what the flashback itself was about, yeah, that didn't really work. But I'm glad you enjoyed that and the characterization. :) Thanks!

alicambs January 18 2011, 10:13:11 UTC

Really enjoying this, but I'm still stunned that Mohinder is keeping the baby!

gaiafaye January 18 2011, 22:42:26 UTC

That would be a much shorter and much more depressing story!

Mohinder has a lot of complicated emotions about the pregnancy, and hopefully by the end of the story I'll have communicated them pretty well.

seraphtrevs January 19 2011, 04:02:45 UTC

One of the many things I love about this fic is the attention to small moments and little details. So much crazy, crazy shit has happened to these characters that I really appreciate a fic that focuses on the little things that we have to do to keep going on, like unpacking boxes and eating Chinese take-out and seeing doctors and calling our mothers, etc ( ... )

PS seraphtrevs January 19 2011, 04:05:37 UTC

I continue to love Peter in this, and I loved the irritating-yet-oddly-endearing Darla.

Re: PS gaiafaye January 20 2011, 05:23:37 UTC

I think paying attention to small moments is what boosted up this chapter's word count! But I'm glad you like them.

Just as Sylar thinks there's a chance for Mohinder to connect to him... Mohinder uses him for sex. But yeah, Mohinder still got the worse end of the deal.

I believe "Nathan's" deterioration starts next chapter. Though at first it's just a little... weird.

I'm glad Darla was endearing, because I was afraid she was a little much. But I needed more characters around with a more positive outlook, if only to annoy Mohinder out of his pessimistic stupors.

Thank you for commenting. :)

aliassmith January 21 2011, 14:52:00 UTC

The terrible tragedy of Sylar's power helping him figure out all but himself.

Yes. This is a brilliant point to make, and also kind of heartbreaking for poor Gabriel Gray.

I absolutely adore the way you've tempered Mohinder's darker moods with the inescapable optimism of Peter and Darla-- you have an impressive balance of light and dark running through this fic, and as noted in the comments above, the little details really make this work.