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Writing Post - Are We There Yet?

Jan 05, 2006 00:37

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Comments 11

cabin_boy January 5 2006, 07:29:03 UTC

...Wow. This is the first time I've read any of your writing. I'm not any sort of decent writing critic, but I think it's very good. I especially like that the sentence, "The cheetahfish was now a beached poop-green whale on my neighbor’s lawn," would make absolutely *no* sense without the prior setup and descriptions you used. ...And it's just a great sentence in general. XD

funambulus January 5 2006, 23:18:03 UTC

lol. <3 Thanks, but now we have ot see what my teacher thinks... I dunno. The 'stakes' in the story didn't feel high enough for me.

nescienx January 5 2006, 15:04:48 UTC

^_^ Flows really well, I like how you convey your life story into an interesting essay.

funambulus January 5 2006, 23:24:10 UTC

Aw, really? *blush* :O... It's... actually a retty boring story when you get to the bones of it.

"OUr breaks failed". XD

nescienx January 6 2006, 04:09:58 UTC

But you make a boring story interesting! :O

sagittavolatili January 5 2006, 22:43:23 UTC

I agree with cabin-boy. The sentence "The cheetahfish was now a beached poop-green whale on my neighbor’s lawn," was brilliant. I started cracking up, which is pretty nice, considering my mother's put me in a very bad mood... which I'm sure you understand :-p
You do write excellently. I enjoyed that very much.

funambulus January 5 2006, 23:47:21 UTC

Lol. <3 I do undeerstand, and I am honored tha tI could make you laugh. X3

ravens_falling January 5 2006, 23:12:10 UTC

I loved it, Woef. I really did...

And I miss ya 'round the boards. We all do. *hug* Hope you're doing well, my friend.

funambulus January 5 2006, 23:48:16 UTC

Aw, Raven, I miss you, too.

Do you mind e-mailing me the last few chapters of SoA 1 so I am caught up when I rejoin the boards? My college apps are over, and I think i've got the time.

I hear Devlin is doing the official art now, and she's a major char XD

ravens_falling January 9 2006, 15:44:19 UTC

Shall send them to you at some point today, babe. It'll be wonderful to see you again. ^_^ And yes, she's been a peach doing some work for me. Adain's in the books too... if you'd not noticed yet. *wink*

funambulus January 9 2006, 23:03:21 UTC

XD Aw, really? Then I really should get back to it! <3 Hehe. My e0mail is fongmingyun@gmail.com if you need it.