It Could Have Been a Perfect Life 01

[fuiflame]

Fanfic : Heroes

Ttitle: It Could Have Been a Perfect Life

Chapter: 1/?

Pairing: Peter/Gabriel, Sylar/Mohinder, Sylar/Gabriel

Ratings: NC 17

Summary: Separated from birth, Gabriel and Sylar lived a completely different live. They went their own way, one as a hero and the other as villain. It wasnt easy for them as they found their soulmates. It pushed

Comments

[xenasoul]

Wonderful start!!
Awesome plot too. I don't like stories with Sylar/Gabriel as the same person but you made them twins so I'm all for it.
I don't care much about Mohinder either but I'm trilled with the Pylar...Ooops Geter? Gater? lol
Please update soon!!

[fuiflame]

I'm updating today. I hope you like the second chapter. Thanks for your comment. Btw, what's the best nickname for them? Found it yet?

[loveren23]

Awesome plot, and I'd love to see where this is going.
Just a suggestion that you might want to find a beta, then I'm sure the story would be superb.

[fuiflame]

Thank you! That's a good suggestion, I'm not okay at diction and a helping hand would be helpful. Um, where can I find a beta?

[loveren23]

Surprisingly, The Pit have one good use: the betas.
http://www.fanfiction.net/betareaders/
You can find them here. I don't know if you post your fics on The Pit but I'm sure you can just e-mail them about this. Good luck with it and can't wait to see more of your works!

[takhallus]

Hi there, I would be happy to beta read for you, as I like your ideas but I think sometimes the language issues make it hard to read.

You can email to mytakhallus [at] googlemail.com if you want me to beta