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mirime_vy in ft_unleashed

Magnetism, chapter 1

Nov 16, 2010 15:03

Title: Magnetism
Chapter: 1
Pairing: Gajeel/Levy
Rating: T
Disclaimer: Hiro Mashima's characters and setting, my story.

( Of rescues and virginal sacrifices (where Gajeel is a reluctant saviour and Levy is too nice for her own good) )

fanfiction, gajeel/levy, magnetism

Comments 2

illezabeth May 1 2011, 00:27:56 UTC

This is a good beginning, though I think more could be said on the issue as to why Droy and Jet don't trust him so much, just so they don't look quite as irrational. Especially as he beat them all up and strung them up on a tree lol. The fact the Levy has forgiven him could be given a lot more weight here too ^_^

mirime_vy May 2 2011, 10:49:55 UTC

First of all, thank you for your comment. As for the points you brought out, they are all addressed later on in the story, some more than the others. Droy and Jet are adressed in chapter four, I believe, while Levy's side is scattered all throughout the story, though a large part of it is explained in the second chapter...
Once again thanks and I'm glad you liked it enough to give it some thought :D