[ ficlet ] Play with Shadows [ Greece/Spain, France/Spain ]

[frostberryjam]

Title: Play With Shadows
Author: frostberryjam
Rated: PG, although some might call it PG-13.
Pairing: (established) Greece/Spain, France/Spain.
Word Count: 500 words.
Warnings: Vague/implied sex.
Summary: A little pretending never hurt anyone, did it?
Author Notes: Written for chromatic_coma for a fic meme, although… I’m really, really sure this probably wasn’t what she

Comments

[zedille]

your lurker is late

This is so sad, but it's amazing how you managed to cram so much sadness, so many powerful images and emotions into so few words. You really feel both of their emotions, how neither of them quite have what they want.

This isn't quite a translation issue as such, but can I ask why it's "j'aime votre peau", "j'aime votre goût,” and then "j'aime ton sourire"? There are two "you"s in French, the formal vous and informal tu, and you're not being consistent here, unless Greece is deliberately switching levels of formality here. I would think that he'd use the more informal tu, but I don't know. if you do change it, "peau" is feminine so it'd be "ta peau" and "ton goût" feel free to ignore me

[frostberryjam]

Ah, that's because that was all done with Google Translate, no humans involved. ┐('～`；)┌ Feel free to suggest a better version.

I'm going to have to write something happy next, I didn't imagine it'd strike people as so sad. Although it really is -- Hetalia is full of love triangles (quadruples+?) and I don't think that gets addressed much in fic. Thank you for your comment. :)

[zedille]

Probably "J'aime ta peau," "J'aime ton goût," and "J'aime ton sourire" then :)

Hetalia is honestly one big love polygon. It's like Six Degrees of Separation, but worse. Everyone knows everyone and is involved with everyone.

Thank you for writing this :)

[keitorin]

Oh wow, so...everything! Just, lovely and sad.