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[frogs_of_war]

 I've been lazy recently, plotting stories rather than writing, and reading ebooks on my computer. (I realize I shouldn't feel guilty because if you don't read, how are you going to write, but maybe it's the quality of what I've read.)

The ebooks/ free stories I've picked up in the past six months or so have been fluff and not the good kind. This is

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[mee_eep]

I've been reading a lot of free stories on goodreads the m/mromance group does an event where authors and newbies write for a prompt pic and letter.
A lot are fluffy but miss the mark for me - The last one I read was full of those 'repeats' you mention; told in first person he reasoned it, then said it, then though on it.

Love you ganache comparison. But now craving chocolate!

Glad you liked them :D
I've still got the Ripper one to read but I love Tamara Allen's writing and 'Only Gold' is a particular favourite. Love how the character is so sympathetic that you feel for him while also seeing the bigger picture and knowing how he must come across to colleagues.

[frogs_of_war]

Sometimes the fluff doesn't bug me, but lint is annoying if there's too much of it.

I read one of those repeats once in a David Eddings novel. The guys looked at the water and wondered how they'd get across. Someone had an idea to make a bridge. He explained it. That group broke up and the POV went to another group and explained what needed to happen. Then they built the bridge. Then someone from who had been away asked them how they got all those people across and they explained it yet again. Four times in maybe twenty pages.

Thank you.

So true. I love when I can tell the POV is an unreliable narrator, and it blows me away how well she did it, since I've tried it once myself.

[mee_eep]

That would be very annoying

[frogs_of_war]

That example isn't a good unreliable narrator. Unless we are supposed to think he's stupid.

One of the stories I read had a guy who was supposed to be a fairly wealth merchant who was good at moving things around and making deals, and he came across that way in some points of view. But sadly not his own (the first POV). I thought for sure he was supposed to be a bubbling fool without even the hint of a spine, and couldn't figure out why the love interest fell for him.

And even when you think the love interest might be a crook, you still understand the main character's need to believe in him.

In Downtime, the story wasn't quite as tight and I was doing the 'but that doesn't make sense' for a while, before everything fell into place. But the story came through when I realized that the whole Ripper subplot was characterization.