The Most Beautiful, the Most Immediate Breath of Life - Part 2 (Kirk/McCoy) PG-13

[fritzfics]

Title: The Most Beautiful, the Most Immediate Breath of Life
Author: fritz42
Fandom:Star Trek AOS
Characters/Pairings: James T. Kirk, Leonard H. McCoy; pre-slash
Ratings: PG-13
Warnings: Angst, grief, previous death of minor character, swearing and tissue warning (so I am told)
Word count: approx. 14,900
Beta: The wonderful

Comments

[omphaloskepsist]

The emotions in this piece are superbly done. Thanks.

[fritzfics]

The emotions in this piece are superbly done. Thanks.

Wow! You can't believe how relieved I was to read that. After working with this story for so long, it was hard to tell after a while. I am so glad that you enjoyed it.

Thank you for taking the time to comment.

"T"

[emluv]

I read this, but then I needed to go blow my nose and have a cookie before I could come back and comment in any sort of coherent manner. So moving and sad. The letter from his father had tears streaming down my cheeks. But I loved how you portrayed Jim being so reasonable and caring and intent on making sure McCoy got whatever it was that was eating at him off of his chest, even if it meant taking slightly underhanded measures. And the details here were lovely--the food from the diner, McCoy's search for the letter, his realization that Jim wasn't reacting as badly as he'd expected to McCoy's confession. Very well done.

But I definitely need another dose of hammock now...

[fritzfics]

Thank you for this lovely comment! It put a huge smile on my face. If I could, I'd give you one of those ginger molasses cookies to help you feel better.

So moving and sad. The letter from his father had tears streaming down my cheeks.

That was one of the hardest things to write in this story, so I am so glad that I was able to pull that off.

But I loved how you portrayed Jim being so reasonable and caring and intent on making sure McCoy got whatever it was that was eating at him off of his chest, even if it meant taking slightly underhanded measures.

I am so glad that you like how I portrayed Jim. To me, Jim isn't the type to make many true friendships, so when he does have a good friend, he would move heaven and earth to help them, even if that friend was trying to hide something from him. He would use almost any means, including underhanded ones, to do that.

Thank you so much for such a nice comment. ♥

"T"

[jlnyr]

Please say that you're gonna write more in this verse? Maybe a continuation of a good dose of hammock. More Bones taking care of Jim? Or a story of what happened on the Enterprise during their trip back to Earth after the Narada. I love stories where the boys take care of each other and u seem to write them really well.

[fritzfics]

Please say that you're gonna write more in this verse?

Wow! Thank you. I'm glad that you are enjoying this little 'verse I have been making. And I am working on a couple of things in it. One will be during their second year of the Academy, fitting in between this story and "A Good Dose of Hammock." The second will maybe be shorty after "A Good Dose of Hammock." We have to get these boys actually "together" sometime.

RL is incredibly busy, though, so it will take me a little while to get them out. I am more of a deliberate type of writer, so I have a tendency to mull things over a lot.

I love stories where the boys take care of each other and u seem to write them really well.

*blushes* Thank you. And I, too, love to see our boys looking out for each other and being there to take care of the other one in times of trouble.

Thanks so much for taking the time to tell me your thoughts! ♥ I really appreciate that.

"T"

[cookiechris80]

Tissues were needed. Tears were shed and some snot may have leaked out as well.

This was absoultely beautiful. Capturing Len's guilt and tension while having Jim being a counterpoint to all that with his quiet understanding worked so well.

So very well written. This is what fanfiction should be about. Thanks for this story.

[fritzfics]

Tissues were needed. Tears were shed and some snot may have leaked out as well.

Okay, I have to admit. That got a snort out of me, but in all seriousness, I am so glad that you enjoyed this story. I've been working on it for a while, so it was hard to tell if I'd be able to convey what was in my head between these two, especially Bones' guilt about what had happened and how that manifested itself in his behavior. My beta was wonderful in providing that feedback, but it is nice to have others reassure me.

I'm so glad that I was able to convey Jim's "quiet understanding." That was what I was going for. To me, Jim hides a maturity and deep understanding of people in pain behind his brash behavior, and I wanted that to come out. And it would come out when he saw his Bones obviously hurting.

So very well written. This is what fanfiction should be about.That gobsmacked me! Wow! I don't know what to say other than thank you so much for such a wonderful comment. And thank you for taking the time to leave me such a lovely

[secretsolitaire]

*sniff* I love the idea of the letters! And Jim being so supportive is lovely.

[fritzfics]

*hands over tissues and cookies*

I'm so glad that you liked the idea of the letters. The letters were the whole start to the story. I had this picture of Bones' dad in my head, and how loving and caring he had been with Bones. I could see Bones' dad being a man who was not afraid to convey his love and thoughts to his son on paper so that Bones could go back to them whenever he needed them.

As for Jim, to me he would have this understanding of the pain Bones was going through and would understand that Bones needed to face that before he could work through it. I wanted him to be that quiet strength that Bones needed.

Thank you for such a lovely comment! It made my day! ♥

"T"