Relentless As The Raincaseyf123February 23 2014, 05:09:59 UTC
A great ending to an amazing story. You did a wonderful job portraying the mental turmoil both Peter and Neal were enveloped in and how it took its toll both physically and emotionally. I loved how you allowed the burning ember of their special friendship to slowly reignite until it burst into the bright flame that is Peter and Neal. That is the only way they could ever hope to truly heal. I'm so glad you freed Neal in the end in more ways than just his anklet. Great job!
A perfect chapter with a little more hurt and comfort which begins the healing. The part where El talked about how she thought Neal had tried to commit suicide because Neal didn't think to contact her, twinged at my heartstrings. Loved it!
What can I say? You have once again outdone yourself. This story is beyond amazing and you have certainly topped the level of heartbreak in the last chapter, with the extent of Neal's trauma gradually rearing its head and Peter and El feeling so helpless and lost, seeing how the smallest gesture of kindness and love has the exact opposite effect, awww...
Poor everybody *hugs them*
I have to admit I was kinda thinking that maybe something shocking needs to happen to finally break through the wall Neal has built around himself... and I guess you and Peter had the same idea. Peter collapsing in the kitchen was so dramatic but at the same time, it was the turning point in Neal's road to recovery.
And ending the story with Neal finally free but wanting to stay with his family a bit longer - absolutely perfect :D ♥
Once again, thank you SO much!! *squee* I am incredibly happy that you enjoyed what I did with your idea.
Totally the best way to fix trauma is with MORE TRAUMA, and I'm glad you agree *gg* I have to admit, I was feeling incredibly cruel while I was writing certain parts of this chapter. (Everyone needs many hugs.) But again, I'm really really happy that you enjoyed it all!
And, once more, thank you SO MUCH for the fantastic artwork! Seriously, I cannot express how happy I am about it :D :D
I read this last night but couldn't form a coherent comment to post. Hopefully I can do justice to your story now.
As much as I WANTED Neal to recover quickly and bounce back, your way was so much more true. The isolation, the complete dependency on Rachel, and the drug addiction - each alone would be difficult to get past. All three simultaneously (and a gunshot wound for good measure), it's no wonder Elizabeth's first thought on finding blood in the kitchen was that Neal had attempted suicide. And yet Rachel would really have needed to do all three to Neal in order to break him. His admission to Peter, "you didn't come and I...forgot" says everything.
Peter's illness, Neal's panic when he realizes he doesn't even know where the phone is, his loss of time in the hospital, Elizabeth's reactions, all were beautifully written. I also appreciated seeing Bruce as a decent human being (since I'm not completely sure of who he is in canon). Mostly, I loved the sweetness and hopefulness of the ending. Thank you for an outstanding
Thank you so much for this amazing comment! :D I am really delighted that you enjoyed this story the whole way through, and especially that how I wrote the aftermath and the ending felt real to you. I did feel mean about breaking Neal so thoroughly, but I always did intend to end happily :)
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The part where El talked about how she thought Neal had tried to commit suicide because Neal didn't think to contact her, twinged at my heartstrings.
Loved it!
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Poor everybody *hugs them*
I have to admit I was kinda thinking that maybe something shocking needs to happen to finally break through the wall Neal has built around himself... and I guess you and Peter had the same idea. Peter collapsing in the kitchen was so dramatic but at the same time, it was the turning point in Neal's road to recovery.
And ending the story with Neal finally free but wanting to stay with his family a bit longer - absolutely perfect :D ♥
Thank you so much again *tacklehugs* \o/
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Totally the best way to fix trauma is with MORE TRAUMA, and I'm glad you agree *gg* I have to admit, I was feeling incredibly cruel while I was writing certain parts of this chapter. (Everyone needs many hugs.) But again, I'm really really happy that you enjoyed it all!
And, once more, thank you SO MUCH for the fantastic artwork! Seriously, I cannot express how happy I am about it :D :D
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As much as I WANTED Neal to recover quickly and bounce back, your way was so much more true. The isolation, the complete dependency on Rachel, and the drug addiction - each alone would be difficult to get past. All three simultaneously (and a gunshot wound for good measure), it's no wonder Elizabeth's first thought on finding blood in the kitchen was that Neal had attempted suicide. And yet Rachel would really have needed to do all three to Neal in order to break him. His admission to Peter, "you didn't come and I...forgot" says everything.
Peter's illness, Neal's panic when he realizes he doesn't even know where the phone is, his loss of time in the hospital, Elizabeth's reactions, all were beautifully written. I also appreciated seeing Bruce as a decent human being (since I'm not completely sure of who he is in canon). Mostly, I loved the sweetness and hopefulness of the ending. Thank you for an outstanding
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Thank you again!
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