Comments | fried_flamingo: New Fic: Near Wild Heaven 1/3

fried_flamingo

New Fic: Near Wild Heaven 1/3

Mar 25, 2008 11:07

Title: Near Wild Heaven
Author: Laura H fried_flamingo
Rating: NC-17
Category: Angst, J/E, Sex
Disclaimer: The Mouse Owns All
A/N: Inspired by the impulse to write a bit of angry J/E sex, this one seemed to grow as I wrote it. WiP at the moment but will only be three chapters long. Title from the REM song of the same name.

( She burst into the room, stumbling over her own feet, and was headed for the floor before a hand grabbed her elbow. The bite of his long fingers though, gave lie to his role as saviour and she didn’t thank him. )

j/e, potc, fic

Comments 33

desiring_me March 25 2008, 12:18:38 UTC

Oh that was lovely. Lovely, and naughty, and full of steam! I can't wait until the next part is up!

fried_flamingo March 25 2008, 21:50:04 UTC

Thank you so much. I'm really pleased you enjoyed it :)

salr323 March 25 2008, 12:56:44 UTC

Oh this is so hot and angry and... *guh*

But I think this line is my favourite:

Hate broke apart, dashed and wrecked upon hidden rocks that lurked below the surface, like shark’s teeth, and she was loathe to name whatever was left in its place.

Oh Lizzie! Oh Jack! :( I'm a sucker for the angst... Can't wait for the conclusion! :)

fried_flamingo March 25 2008, 21:52:15 UTC

In the next installment Jack buy Lizzie a box of Thornton's chocolates and a teddy bear with 'I wuv you' embroidered onto it ;)

skybound2 March 25 2008, 14:58:39 UTC

Something had turned his sin-black eyes to lead
That is a beautiful line right there.

“Can’t let this happen,” he rasped, a tempest raging upon his face. “Can’t let you…”

“Can’t let me what?” she spat. Anger burned in her, vying for dominance over desire “Don’t you dare, Jack Sparrow. Don’t you dare paint me wicked in this.”

“I can’t think, Elizabeth. Can’t think when I’m near you. Don’t know if I despise you or… or…”

Oh, but damn! That exchange is just so raw.

Amazing opener.

fried_flamingo March 25 2008, 21:54:46 UTC

Thanks! I really wanted this to quite raw so I'm glad it worked and I'm pleased you enjoyed the first chapter.

Next installment soon :)

silerswench March 25 2008, 15:07:26 UTC

A gorgeous first chapter, the tidal force of their emotions sweep you up and carry you away. Looking forward to part two!!

fried_flamingo March 25 2008, 21:57:06 UTC

Thank you so much :)

I think they're pretty carried away with their own emotions and don't know how to hold themselves back at this point or even how to express those emotions.

Next part to come soon :D

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fried_flamingo March 25 2008, 21:57:41 UTC

Thanks! More to come soon :)