FNL Script: Accessories, Part II

[vacheqirit]

Title: FNL Script: Accessories, Part II
Author: vacheqirit
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: S1
Disclaimers: FNL and these characters are the properties of their owners. No infringements intended.
Author's Note: This is the second part of my AU (Alternate Universe) Script.

Comments

[treehero]

Wow, this is a strong Act II. I think it moves better than Act I actually. You move the Tim/Jason story and Tyra's story to good points. I laughed out loud at the Tim/Jason/Matt "guinea pig" scene. And Tami's "couch talk" with Eric about Matt. You definitely have the characters' voices down. I was wondering why Matt would ask Mrs. T to take him because he'd have to know she might say something to Eric. The fact, as she says later to Eric, that Matt was smart in knowing she couldn't reveal personal details seems a little too easy. I wouldn't think Matt would take any risk at all in her learning something. Is there another way he has to end up going with Mrs T? Or is there another way she can learn of the info without having taken him to the appointment? Not a huge point, but it was nagging me a little. And I've been called myself on plot advances that seem a little too easy, so I'm always interested in how people work themselves out of those holes

[vacheqirit]

Again, great suggestions. I particularly like the scene cut-offs you suggest. Very FNL. It's great to have your input because you're a TV pro AND an FNL fan. Thanks so much.