Fic: All The Things She Said

[freneticfloetry]

All The Things She Said
Smallville, Oliver Queen/Chloe Sullivan. Spoilers through “Salvation.”
Don’t own them, just borrowing them for my own amusement. Summary courtesy of The Mountain Goats. Banner courtesy of the wonderful nivieniv.
"And I am coming home to you, with my own blood in my mouth / and I am coming home to you, if it's the last thing that I

Comments

[leafairy124]

Oh.My.God. This was so freaking incredible! Really and truly an excellent piece of work! So heartbreaking and moving and still hopeful at the end. *sigh* Amazing.

Loved and enjoyed this - Thanks so much for sharing!!

[freneticfloetry]

Thank you for reading and commenting! I'm thrilled to hear that you enjoyed it.

[lilyayl]

I really like this. Oh, Oliver. I like that it is his inner!Chloe that keeps him going. The memories slot so well into canon. I love that Chloe doesn't need, but that she wants him. I am so glad that you pulled me onto this ship.

(You know what would be really, really annoying? If they decided to play with the time line and do a 'two years later' type deal or something. Or, if they decided to flip between the future (with Lex back, glasses!Clark, etc) and the past with some mystery that ties both times together. And meanwhile, one mystery is why Chloe (or Oliver) is missing in the future. Worst of all, though? Any character who isn't really their character. Even in only the bits I watched, SV has definitely overdone that trope.)

[freneticfloetry]

I'm so glad that you let me pull you into this ship! The two of them are truly amazing together, but it's because they're both so amazing on their own.

If they actually do any of that, I swear to all that is holy that I will make a compilation vid of nine seasons of Clark whining and bitching and being a douche, tie TPTB to their chairs, and put it on endless loop.

[lilyayl]

I think you just recreated one of the tortures of hell.

[freneticfloetry]

God, bring on the brimstone. Just spare me the Big Dumb Alien.

[gen717]

This was absolutely brilliant! Loved every single word!

[freneticfloetry]

Thank you, dear! Quite a compliment, coming from you. :)

[novadelphine]

First, you have made me one happy lil chick, cause I have kept my fingers crossed FOREVER, hoping you'd write Chlollie again!

Second, brilliant. All of it. The characterization, the dialogue, the attention to detail (Parademons, Furies, Darkseid, all of them, spot on), your mastery of subtlety, the Green quotes from the show(!), the nicknames for the League, the ENTIRE "scar" interaction... and on, and on, and on.

It was just such a great read with so many lines, words, exchanges and phrases that I just adored. Honestly, I'd quote the whole thing as my favourite, but seeing as that's ridiculous, I forced myself down to the one part that practically knocked me over:

' She tucked a piece of hair behind her ear and forced her eyes back to him, cornered but still Chloe, his Chloe, brilliant and beautiful and ballsy to the end, and he fell all over again.

"No," she said, and there wasn't a shred of doubt in it. "But isn't it enough that I want you to?" '

Annnnnd, I'm wrecked. Excellent, amazing writing. I can't say it enough.

[freneticfloetry]

You certainly know how to make a girl blush. :)

I am so thrilled that this wasn't too vague to get the villains across. I really didn't want it to be about them - it was about Oliver retreating into his head, trying to escape the situation the only way he could - but I wanted them to have a presence rooted in the mythos, so yay! Glad to hear that worked.

I cannot tell a lie - the scar conversation was borne of annoyance. I cannot believe that we have mortally-wounded Oliver one episode, he's gone for the next two, and then Chloe's slapping a walkie to his chest like nothing ever happened. I know this is Smallville, but lazy storytelling abounds. Doesn't it merit a throwaway line, even? This is Oliver's chest we're talking about. It practically has parenthetical billing! (Next season, credits will read: "Justin Hartley (and Justin Hartley's chest).")

Long story short: thank you. :)

[kateschechter]

This was amazing. Every line so well-chosen and so in character. How do you write a story where one my faves is being tortured, separated from my other fave, and yet imbue it with such hope. That she's the voice in his head, his safe place is perfect. I love the idea that basically for Ollie, Chloe is his superhero.

So happy to also see there might be more of the "All Along the Watchtower" series as well, since that was brilliant.

[freneticfloetry]

Awww, thank you for such wonderful feedback. Writing this was cathartic, in a way. And I truly believe that, in Oliver's eyes, Chloe is every bit his hero.