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freneticfloetry

Fic: All Bets Are Off

Feb 28, 2008 16:22

All Bets Are Off
Smallville, Oliver, Chloe, prequel to In This Late Hour.
They still don't belong to me. There is no justice in the world. And If I owned an Ollie, I could do something about that.
She's not making this easy. Luckily, he never could resist a challenge.

( It seemed like a good idea... )

fic: complete, fic: smallville, fic

Comments 22

svgurl February 29 2008, 00:06:22 UTC

Excellent fic! This one made me giggle. Ollie being scared of Clark was just hilarious.

The Chloe/Ollie banter wins!

“Have you lost your jolly green mind?”

His face split into a grin, and he tossed a casual wave to a couple strolling by. At that volume they could’ve caught it from the sidewalk. “And hello to you, too. Which part of that ‘I’ll’ didn’t you understand?”

I love that part! I could just see it in my head. It was all wonderful though.

Great work!

Thanks for writing and sharing!

freneticfloetry March 1 2008, 18:05:21 UTC

Thanks so much! I have a huge weakness for banter, and the two of them are pros. Glad you enjoyed it.

bayb43 February 29 2008, 01:13:51 UTC

Oh, love it! Particularly how determined Ollie gets at the end to make it happen and convince her. Great job!

freneticfloetry March 1 2008, 18:06:03 UTC

I think Ollie has a fondness for gauntlet throwing. :) Thanks for reading, and for leaving your thoughts.

daisybalance February 29 2008, 03:49:31 UTC

Oh! How exciting! This thoroughly enriches a story I already loved. (Of course if you wanted to keep expanding our glimpse of the adventure, I'd be happy to come along for the ride.) Ollie's fidgeting is great - he tries to keep it low keep, but the movement is constant, and the dialogue is all wonderful.

freneticfloetry March 1 2008, 18:07:35 UTC

This was actually supposed to be part of the sequel. In my head, in was short and sweet, just a little setup from Ollie's POV. On paper, though, it took on a life of its own. Thank you for the feedback, it's much appreciated.

daisybalance March 2 2008, 02:01:02 UTC

So then, there is more sequel to come? Or more prequel? You use Ollie's perspective quite well.

(Academic interest is a mere cover for my excited flailing of joy.)

freneticfloetry March 2 2008, 16:13:20 UTC

The actual sequel is upcoming, yes. It'll be a little while - it's longer, and definitely darker. But still Oliver's POV. Like the rest of my favorite male characters, he's a hoot and a half to write. :)

Thanks again!

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freneticfloetry March 1 2008, 18:08:59 UTC

Chloe's a huge part of what keeps me watching, and definitely my favorite character. She deserves a little Lana-like wooing of her own. :) Happy to hear that you enjoyed it.

syrenstar March 2 2008, 12:47:45 UTC

“Tell the boys to suit up. We’re on recon.”

*silly grin* I love Ollie and the boys.

So from what you posted upthread we can expect more? I love the set up of this fic.

freneticfloetry March 2 2008, 16:01:51 UTC

Same here. :)

Yes, there will be more. Longer and a bit darker, but in the same universe. Seems I've been bitten by the Chlollie bug (but really, who would complain?). Thanks for reading!