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[broken__records]

Title: Clauses
Author: broken__records
Pairing: Jim/Pam
Word Count: 501
Rating: T
Summary: Random AU angst set...late season two, I guess. He’s a drunken doorbell ringing at three in the morning...
Author's Note: I feel like this gets kinda bogged down with the structure I'd set up and my weird need for alliteration just about everywhere and things, but, I don't

Comments

[lalamonstah]

this is neat- poetic, really.
very visual :]

[bebitched]

There's a different style to this that I really love; very sensory, very embodied with emotion. Great job! Though “I’m pregnant,” her breath tastes bitter against his tongue. kind of stabbed me in the gut.

[hippie_lover]

Oh wow, just amazing!

[unhappenable]

I love this, mostly because I can sympathize with wanting alliteration all over the place. But also because of:

“Right,” hands get shoved deep in his pockets as if it will hide what they’ve done.

and

He’s an upward roll of glassy eyes, a preventative swallow;..., I guess because it's such a good description of what he does at the end of Casino Night.

Yay :D:D And I just need to clarify; it's Roy's kid, right? Jim's not being a douchebag??

[broken__records]

Thanks!

And, haha, yeah, it's Roy's kid.

[feministyogini]

I love the risks you took with this since it's a departure from your usual style... and yet not? Somehow, your voice still comes through.

a glimpse of her clavicle would take him down like he was nothing.
You had me at this line because they're so freakin' Victorian in S2.