Fanfiction, Senses:Sight

[fourangers]

Title: Tight crimson threads

Author: Fourangers

Genre: Angst, a tiny bit of romance. I think.

Rating: NC-17

Word Count: 4.711 words

Warnings: it’s NC-17, duh. And it’s a weird fic.

Summary: When your resolute mind is able to block the desires of your heart, there’s only one way to relieve the passion. Surround yourself to each primitive sensations.

Comments

[k_undertoe]

Awwww,I didn't think it was sick! I thought it was really really tragic *sniffle* The way Sasuke just kind of lets it happen at first, how much he needs it is apparent. and then then ending!!!! *BAAAAWL*

[fourangers]

But Sasuke is still a demented person...XD Yeah, the ending is sort of...that yes, maybe Naruto would forgive Sasuke if he ever return his consciousness (after he kicks the teme's ass so hard and then patches himself all Sasuke's wounds)
Writing Sasuke's emotions were a more difficult feat for me to do based on the latest chapters... >_> It was refreshing to show a fragile and human Sasuke once again.
*gives the tissue to her*

[k_undertoe]

I was actually waiting for the Kyuubi to wake up and be all, "Oh I don't think so, b*tch!" and then show him who the boss was. XD, And yeah, WTF Kishimoto, W.T.F. After Sasu killed his bro, he got a case of lame-oh.

[fourangers]

Hm....good ide--wait, I don't want to write a sequel to this fucking fic! D<

I also thought it was pretty lame (still thinks) but now it all patches up with the current arc, which coincides Naruto wants to get revenge against Pain, but knows that this won't be the answer for everything. That the cycle of revenge brings forth more revenge. Which is the cycle that Saucesages is taking.
If Naruto; somehow, realizes how to not exactly forgive Pain, but something else that won't be the revenge path, that means that he's ready to face Sasuke and truly convince Sasuke to come back to Konoha and therefore, give up about vengeance.
Though seriously, it'd be waaaaaaaay easier and faster if only Naruto would appear in front of Sasuke and do a strip tease. No, really, any men would turn gay for a naked chest like Naruto (chap. 439...XD drools) But nooooo...they prefer doing the wrong other way!
Aaaaaah...Kishimoto, why do you likes to make us suffer so much?

[ylmik_wisty]

Oooh, wow! That was really interesting, Naruto's soul also sealed away. I love how they (or more like Sasuke, ordering Naruto along) are on the run from both villages. Also the bit about Naruto reacting to Sakura's chakra, that was so sweet, I loved that part. :)
XD I like how twisted it is for Sasuke to order Naruto around like that!! Naruto will probably break free someday and give Sasuke a hard punch. Heh.

[fourangers]

Yeah...(sighs) shows how deep inside I'm still a sucker for NaruSaku...XD I mean-- No! Shows that Naruto still thinks about Konoha and his comrades! Yeah, yeah...:P
Sasuke is always twisted, so this doesn't surprise me much. XD
When Naruto breaks free from this weird spell, probably he'd rape Sasuke back...yay! (but no, I wouldn't want to write that...don't want to write sequels...)

[forcefedmodels]

Such perfect angst. That was really great.

[fourangers]

Thank you! :D I wrote another one-shot, take a look if you want <3

[ookami_ryuu]

Ooh the beginning was slightly confusing (in a good way, since I suppose that was kind of the point XD) with the 'happenings' mixed with 'narrator' XD
And the eating scene was so sad, and you descibed Sasuke's feelings and thoughts so well. And Naruto somehow still recognizing Sakura's chakra was so RIGHT and Sasuke's team being all supporting was amazing. *totally in fan-mode*
And Naruto being some kind of doll was creepy, and Sasuke's... desperation was so beautiful.
And damnit I was supposed to quote something from somewhere in the story but I lost it. >.> Sorry...
But just.. the ending too... So good! Argh I don't have words. *frustrated*

If Naruto ever comes back I know he will forgive Sasuke... after he gives him a good beating. XD Because he's so forgiving... to a fault almost... Especially when it comes to Sasuke.
........then he will fuck Sasuke right back as revenge XDXDXD

[fourangers]

Ooh the beginning was slightly confusing (in a good way, since I suppose that was kind of the point XD) with the 'happenings' mixed with 'narrator' XD

Hm...actually, I didn't want to be THAT confusing. But on the other hand, I didn't want to put italic nor bold, because...now that I'm thinking, I should've put in italic. :facepalm

And the eating scene was so sad, and you descibed Sasuke's feelings and thoughts so well.

YEAH! LET SASUKE SUFFER FOR A WHILE! XD *cough* I mean...

And Naruto somehow still recognizing Sakura's chakra was so RIGHT and Sasuke's team being all supporting was amazing. *totally in fan-mode*

The first one was a manifestation of my ex-NaruSaku days. XD
The second one, it was more like that I was glad that Taka became a group of comrades instead of only colleagues. Yah...

And Naruto being some kind of doll was creepy, and Sasuke's... desperation was so beautiful.

Eh...totally agree with you. XD

And damnit I was supposed to quote something from somewhere in the story but I lost it. >.> Sorry

[ookami_ryuu]

Hm...actually, I didn't want to be THAT confusing. But on the other hand, I didn't want to put italic nor bold, because...now that I'm thinking, I should've put in italic. :facepalm

No no! It wasn't THAT confusing. XD It just took 'longer' to realize what the scene was actually about. (I said slightly confusing in a good way!) I think the little '-' you put in front of 'narrator' was quite enough. *smile*

YEAH! LET SASUKE SUFFER FOR A WHILE! XD *cough* I mean...

*laugh*

The first one was a manifestation of my ex-NaruSaku days. XD
The second one, it was more like that I was glad that Taka became a group of comrades instead of only colleagues. Yah...

Well Sakura is important! Some fanfiction writers seems to forget that. >.>
And yes I agree... that's nice. *hurr*

No prob. about it Dragonwolfie, I kinda get it. XD I personally don't like the end...kind of. Hate and like at the same time. Well...*flees*Well I think a lot of writers have a love-hate-relationship to their own stories. *snicker* I suck at writing endings myself

beautiful

[ester_gray]

I can't believe you made me cry. D;

His desperation is an intrinsic and often overlooked part of Sasuke's character. Having Naruto, whom I firmly believe is Sasuke's only living bond, almost die, then to lose him and just have his body is heartbreaking. It also allows us to peek into his fragility; he could never ever show it to Naruto if he was awake. A wonderfully tragic, desperate, sick piece of work.

Also, the way you bolded 'strip' was like a f**king punch in the gut. It was so immediate and shocking that I gasped and started whispering no over and over. The guilt he feels is almost palpable, and then completely overtaken by the last shreds of his desire to be happy that he almost can't stop what he's doing. Goddammit I'm crying again. Losing badass points by the second and it's all your fault.