Bitter Refuuuuge
So here is a scene that I'm really fond of and I wanted to show seperately. I love the references I made in it, but I doubt anyone will pick them up, caue its quiet obscure.
Title: (Scene from) Bitter Refuge
Rating: M, for the desperate acts of Sakura.
Warnings: Erm, Sakura is being human and Konan is not? xD
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( Bitter Refuge )
Title: (Scene from) Bitter Refuge
Rating: M, for the desperate acts of Sakura.
Warnings: Erm, Sakura is being human and Konan is not? xD
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( Bitter Refuge )
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Smart as usual though.
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I see subtle hints of SasuSakuNaru in there, most definitely. You probably intended it to be so; I know you like that pairing. Only when she talks about looking for dark hair or blue eyes though.
The tiny bits in italics broke things up a little and set the tone. It was good, not at all happy and not really that sad either, but good. If asked what the mood wasy; I would say sombre and maybe a teensy weensy bit macabre, but that's just me.
I can't wait until you explain Konan's supposed powers. It sounds like it will be interesting. Sakura's IC, or at least, as IC as she would be in this situation. My lack of knowledge about the backstory is killing me.
I know I saw a couple of mistakes in here, but this is just a draft-y excerpt thing so I'm sure you know about them. Brilliant, keep it up.
It looks like it's going to be a monster.
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Yer, the scene didn't feel quiet right till I added the italic bits~ I like it macbre, thats kinda what I wanted. This scene in particular is a bible reference, and inspired movie by a movie Gabriel, at least how I imagine the hallway in the mine... green walls that are really dirty and grunge looking...
PHEAR THE LACK OF BACKSTORY. There is so much hinted, but never full explained~ Maybe I'll make a series of shots preludings to it, and explaining other things mentioned.
Yer, this thing is going to be a BITCH it beta, cause there is so much of it! DX
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