Comments | fma_fic_contest: Prompt 218, That's What SHE Said, "Error: Miscommunication Level High"

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Prompt 218, That's What SHE Said, "Error: Miscommunication Level High"

May 09, 2013 15:20

Title: Error: Miscommunication Level High
Author: Zippit
Timeline: Post Manga/Brotherhood
Character(s): Roy Mustang/Edward Elric
Rating: G
Word Count: 739
Beta: Thanks to catw00man. All other errors are mine.
Author’s Note: Finally, I have some time to breathe again.

Summary: Roy gets some bad advice and what should've been a relaxing several days turns ( Read more... )

prompt 218, zippitgood

Comments 11

amethyst_koneko May 10 2013, 03:14:52 UTC

^_^ I'm sure Winry had their best interests in mind when she sent them to this place but I can't shake the feeling that she did this to get back at Ed for something, something like automail wrecked one time too many! Poor Roy, victim of a long running argument! :D

zippitgood May 11 2013, 23:29:28 UTC

Hehe, yeah I had that same feeling too. Best intentions are not so good after all, lol.

catw00man May 10 2013, 20:04:31 UTC

PRECIOUS!!!

I do so adore your Ed. You always get his attitude down so well without watering him down even a little. He's perfect and I love how he interacts with Roy. Pity his bastard had to be so sleepy, but it real gave a nice cozy scene for the two of them.

WELL DONE! :-D Now write more! LOL

zippitgood May 11 2013, 23:30:37 UTC

Ed's always so easy to capture though I've been writing from Roy's POV lot lately. Time to change it up.

Thanks and I'm trying. :P

ssadropout May 11 2013, 22:16:20 UTC

I think that is exactly what a grown-up Ed would be like. Just like the pre-teen and teen aged Ed, but a tiny bit less rough around the edges. And a lot more able to show his affection. Well done.

zippitgood May 11 2013, 23:31:38 UTC

I agree. Ed does grow up but that doesn't mean he stops being Ed.

Thanks!

apgeeksout May 12 2013, 14:43:27 UTC

I have a feeling they'll manage to salvage the trip. I like this twist on the prompt; Nice work!

zippitgood May 12 2013, 17:23:17 UTC

I'm sure they will too.

Thanks!

cornerofmadness May 12 2013, 17:48:58 UTC

As someone who has to turn her conferences into her 'vacation' I feel Ed's pain. well done

zippitgood May 12 2013, 19:33:03 UTC

I don't envy you that at all, but at least you get to play when your work's done?

Thanks!

cornerofmadness May 12 2013, 21:11:33 UTC

I sure hope so since it's a conference in Vegas in two weeks for me