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Prompt 176- Arrogance- "Disappointed"

Jul 19, 2012 23:39

Title: Disappointed
Author: ssadropout
Series: A/U (Takes place after any series.)
Word Count: 385
Rating: Teen
Characters: Roy Mustang
Summary: He’d expected something much more appealing than what he ended up with.
Warnings: Language. Mention of bodily functions and fluids.
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Common wisdom advises that a person can’t smell his own stink.

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ssadropout, prompt 176

Comments 8

pedanticpigeon July 20 2012, 09:59:52 UTC

This was quite dark... and I loved every word of it! Everything about this fic was absolutely brilliant. I just want to shower you with never-ending compliments after reading it.

"The flies loved the perfume of his slow death."
I envy you. I envy you for being able to concoct lines as terrific as that one. It is very simple, but also very poetic. I can only dream to be able to write as well as you can.

ssadropout July 20 2012, 22:23:16 UTC

Thank you! I often write fluff, so I try to take a trip to the dark side every once in a while. Your very kind compliments make me blush!

You are too hard on yourself. You are clearly a talented writer, and I look forward to reading your fics.

antigone_rex July 20 2012, 10:45:08 UTC

This made me feel uncomfortable... which, I imagine, was what you were going for in this piece. I especially loved the paragraph where you describe the way Roy thought he'd die. Man... It's like crazy good.

Well, well done!

ssadropout July 20 2012, 22:28:54 UTC

Yes, I was not going for the feel-good thing this week. (I usually do.) Someone I care about died last month, so the ugliness of it is on my mind. Thanks so very much.

sofipitch July 20 2012, 15:09:57 UTC

Good work, and great writing, and you left me very distubed. I really liked this.
But I'm blaming you if I'm capable of finishing my breakfast.

ssadropout July 20 2012, 22:32:22 UTC

Well, I apologize for messing up your meal. That was terribly rude of me! I'll probably go back to writing fluff for my next entry, so, not to worry. :)

Thanks a lot for your review.

cornerofmadness July 22 2012, 21:35:17 UTC

ouch, this one is very painful and very well done. Poor Roy.

ssadropout July 23 2012, 00:23:37 UTC

I think, sadly, that death is more often slow and painful and rarely quick and clean. Thank you!