Prompt 156, Gun Malfunction, "Bonds of War"

[halighfataliter]

Title: Bonds of War
Author: Halighfataliter
Word Count: 499
Rating: PG
Characters: Jean Havoc, Riza Hawkeye
Warnings: Mild swearing. Also, this is mainly military narrative. I hope you'll bear with me. 
Author's Note: Ishval, that I mention in the first paragraph, is the city of Ishval.

Summary: The Hawkeye earns Jean's loyalty amidst the dust and the

Comments

[ladynorbert]

It's a very good story, but a little tip: if it contains "mild swearing," then it's not rated G. A G-rated story would not contain any. But outside of that, GREAT job.

[halighfataliter]

Thank you, both for your appreciation and your remark. So then is it PG or PG-13?

[ladynorbert]

I would say PG.

[halighfataliter]

Rectified. Thanks a bunch :)

[bay115]

Oh, quite interesting. Like the idea of Riza watching over Havoc (I actually like to think she's watching her whole team and not just Mustang ;) ). Great work!

As for the rating, I would go with PG since I seemed to only catch one swearing word. It seemed you already edited the rating though, LOL.

[halighfataliter]

Ahah, I'm the girl who edits faster than her shadow...

I'm glad you liked it :D I think it actually makes more sense that she should be watching over soldiers like Havoc. Alchemists like Roy or Kimblee can fight long distance and I don't see them, human weapons, be asked to patrol afterwards.

[ghostfriendly]

A very personnal story (not quite as personal as the one about Knox, but what is?) with an effective sense of restrained frustration. Really like this.

[halighfataliter]

Thanks :)

[ssadropout]

This was very effective. I like the idea of Havoc's prior experience with Hawkeye figuring into his decision to stay with Mustang.

[halighfataliter]

Thanks :)

[vince_moon]

Sorry I'm late, but this is an excellent story.

[halighfataliter]

That's really sweet of you to take the time to comment so late. I'm really glad you liked it, thanks :)