Prompt #94, Realistic Portrayal: "The Girl in the Bar"

[gretchen8642]

Title: The Girl in the Bar

Comments

[sudasana]

This makes me want to be Roy so much. But I would choose you!

[gretchen8642]

you're so sweet I don't even <3 <3 <3

[bay115]

Awwwww. I do feel sorry for fic!you being put through like that, even if Roy is awesome as the manga/anime progresses, haha. The flow and pacing in this piece is great, can see the development between the two of you being shown. Great work!

[gretchen8642]

it doesn't even have to be me, it could just be some lady who likes roy XD
but thanks so much, glad you enjoyed it <3

[cornerofmadness]

i saw this prompt and my first thought was, well, I'd have sex with Roy

glad I wasn't alone. I really liked how this story progressed

[gretchen8642]

XD he's a lovely thing though, everyone wants Roy

thanks

[r_kimono]

I know this is supposed to be you but I can definitely imagine this happening to one of Roy's dates - her falling in love, even knowing (and accepting) that his heart is elsewhere. :( Very bittersweet and well portrayed.

[gretchen8642]

yeah that's kinda how I wrote it, I didn't really feel that comfortable putting myself in fma, so it's me/some random chick. glad you liked it, and thanks so much for reading <3

[missyquill]

I think Emma (you) is a personification of just about every fangirl. I would totally have sex with Roy, even if he would be trying to find Riza in me. Heck, I would even let him call me "Riza" if he followed it with an "I love you". *has no shame*

It's just so bloody heartbreaking that on one side, Riza is fucking Havoc or some other guy trying to fulfill a need only Roy can satisfy, and he is screwing chicks he meets at the bar when its only ever been her he wants to hold and love. *tear*