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Prompt 63 - Weakness, "A Moment of Weakness"

May 20, 2010 20:42

Title: A Moment of Weakness
Author: inugrlrayn
Series: manga
Word Count: 482
Rating: pg
Characters: Roy, Ed
Summary: It's all over and Ed still hasn't woken up
Warning: Manga Spoilers

( It had nothing to do with the hopelessness that crept up on him some days, or the fact that in this chair at least he wasn’t tripping over the rubble and chaos Amestris had been reduced to. )

inugrlrayn, prompt 63

Comments 5

seaweed_fma May 21 2010, 02:21:07 UTC

Wow, I would REALLY love to see this expanded.

Excellent job, you really see how upset Roy is that Ed seems to be once again getting the short (pun intended) end of the stick.

cxrdevil May 21 2010, 02:41:19 UTC

Your italics are well-placed and wow, mood.

a_big_apple May 21 2010, 02:51:29 UTC

This is gorgeous.

cornerofmadness May 22 2010, 01:42:01 UTC

very nicely done

raceulfson May 23 2010, 00:03:52 UTC

I really like this. I can see Roy hovering by Ed's bedside, at least until the Rockbell's are summoned. I loved that Roy was both coping with and avoiding his own problems by focusing on Ed. And I'm glad Ed didn't wake up alone.