Prompt 51, Train, "Wordless, Breathless"

[gretchen8642]

Title: Wordless, Breathless
Author: gretchen8642
Series: Manga
Word Count: 498
Rating: pg-13/R
Characters/Pairing: Roy Mustang/Maes Hughes.
Summary: Perhaps their friendship had started on the wrong foot.
Warnings: spoilers for stuff that happened in volume 4

This is my first entry to this com! :O

Comments

[ghostfriendly]

Not such a fan of slash, but this had lots of real love and feeling in, well done, and hoe to read more from you.

[gretchen8642]

Oh wow thanks! That really means a lot <3

[sudasana]

I liked the rhythm of the first paragraph a lot, and the entire narrative hangs together really well. Very touching, the sadness propels it past cliche into the realm of the sublime.

[gretchen8642]

Aw thanks hon! You are a giant sweetie muffin for reading <3

[kurokaze_sama]

I'm really digging the vision that the fourth paragraph leaves. And this piece has me flailing in general. Nice work. : D

[gretchen8642]

Thank you so much! <3

[cornerofmadness]

I loved how this one progressed through the years. well done

[gretchen8642]

Aw thank you very much.

[seaweed_fma]

I love how descriptive it is. It really feels like you are there. You can really feel how they feel, get into their head.

Awesome. :)

[gretchen8642]

aw thanks tina!