HOUSE M.D. FIC: Sliding Doors

Feb 26, 2011 11:01

My first experimentation with drabbles, inspired by barefootpuddles 's latest.

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drabbles, house m.d., house/wilson, slash, alternate universe, complete story, fanfiction, wilson/amber

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damigella_314 February 26 2011, 16:48:32 UTC
This is absolutely wonderful.And I love the rhythm that the sequence of drabbles gives to the fic.
The end, is unfortunately, heartbreaking; even in this AU, House will start allucinating from the Vicodin. Sh*t!

My favorite detail:
"After his second trip to the bathroom,"
Ah, beer. Yes, I'm as shallow in my sense of humor as that. Shallower, in fact.

A question. "He hasn’t been easy with either of them"
I found this difficult to understand. However, I'm not a native speaker, and for all I know it's crystal clear. I'm also mostly familiar with British English anyway.

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flywoman February 26 2011, 18:19:44 UTC
I'm very glad to hear that you liked this - thanks very much for your comments!

The end, is unfortunately, heartbreaking; even in this AU, House will start allucinating from the Vicodin. Sh*t!
Yes... it was interesting to think about what might have been different vs. what might have stayed the same. Between his father's death, Kutner's suicide, and his increasing drug dependence, I think that House might well have ended up in the same state even if Amber hadn't been on the bus.

"He hasn’t been easy with either of them"
It would be more common to say "He hasn't been at ease with either of them." But saying "easy" in the sense of "free from worry or anxiety" works too, I think.

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damigella_314 February 26 2011, 18:42:47 UTC
Thank you very much! I didn't start reading fanfic to improve my English, but it might be an unavoidable side effect.

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petitecuriosity February 26 2011, 17:00:01 UTC
You know, it's odd, but for some reason I never actually considered what would have happened if Amber hadn't been on the bus with House...You've written it very believably. I really like the imagery in "Lost Property." The way you've described the hospital really makes it sound loud and uncomfortable, like it probably would sound to the victim of an accident. Also, the use of the word "raggedly" was a really good choice for describing Wilson's emotional state. I completely agree with you, I really don't think that Amber would stand for Wilson pulling away from her, and I'm glad that you've illustrated this difference from his other relationships ( ... )

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flywoman February 26 2011, 18:29:53 UTC
I really don't think that Amber would stand for Wilson pulling away from her, and I'm glad that you've illustrated this difference from his other relationships.
I've always wondered whether Amber and Wilson would have made it. Of course, this is mostly because she shares so many characteristics with House ;).

I like how you've taken the scene in "Small Sacrifices" and altered it. I definitely think that Wilson would have wanted to marry Amber, but that if the accident had gone the way you described it, it would have deterred him.
Thanks, I really enjoyed including the twist on "Small Sacrifices." I also think that Wilson would have felt guilty, and shaken up by almost losing House, and maybe he could have taken that last step of acknowledging his feelings (at least when pushed!).

The last drabble is definitely my favorite, because it's a bit cryptic.I deliberately kept it vague, but in my mind, House might still feel some subconscious guilt about his interactions with Amber - turning her down for his team, competing with her for ( ... )

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cuddyclothes February 26 2011, 18:00:01 UTC
Excellent, vivid story.

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flywoman February 26 2011, 18:30:46 UTC
Thank you! :)

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alternatealto February 26 2011, 18:28:00 UTC
Oooh, I like! Each of these really is its own set of doors, giving us a brief glimpse into the characters' lives. And within each story, some doors are opening for them and others are closing -- and they may or may not realize which.

Very nice!

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flywoman February 26 2011, 18:35:48 UTC
Thank you! And you're right, each vignette (at least until the last) is a turning point in which some paths close off while others open, and this could well be represented as sliding doors. It's awesome when a reader notices something of which I was not consciously aware!

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jezziejay February 26 2011, 19:15:20 UTC
I love reading anything featuring 'the road not taken', and these are great. Lots of lovely little details - I had to read through them a few times to get them all. The last one is, I think, the most powerful - I really enjoyed how you showed that all roads still lead to House's breakdown. Gave me a little shiver when I read it!

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flywoman February 26 2011, 19:23:24 UTC
I couldn't just end things on an optimistic note, could I? ;) Glad that you enjoyed it!

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