HOUSE M.D. FIC: Regarding House, 6/7

[flywoman]

Chapter 6: Filling in the Blanks
"Data! Data! Data!" he cried impatiently. "I can't make bricks without clay."

When I first mounted the bike, my hands shaky on the grips, I didn’t have a clear idea of where I should be headed. There was, in fact, a strong, panicky urge simply to ride straight into oncoming traffic, but it was trumped by

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[petitecuriosity]

I can definitely see House freaking out like this and tearing up his apartment. It was difficult to read, but painfully realistic.

It was really interesting to see both Foreman and Chase talking to him; Chase has a certain, sometimes visible vulnerability. He admires House, cares about his approval, and cares about him. House becoming suicidal would be difficult on him and you really made that come across. I also like how you've kept him completely in character; he would try to stand up to House, tell him the blunt truth, but he would be too soft and hurt by what happened to actually punch him in this case I think. And House, while shaken by what he said, wouldn't want to accept the reality of what he was saying and, as Foreman said, Chase wouldn't have made it come across as well as he could have.

Foreman would have been more casual, more serious about things, but still with glimpses of care underneath.

I could see the wedding photo so clearly in my head; I feel like the description of it and this line:

She could never be

[flywoman]

House becoming suicidal would be difficult on him and you really made that come across.
I was also trying to hint that watching House drink would have triggered emotional responses to his own mother's alcoholism and death.

There is one last chapter in this fic and I will be sorry to see it end

:) Thank you for this, and for all of your feedback!

[sara_tsuzuki]

Geeez!!! more angst! I love angsta >D But I need to know more! *runs to read*

[flywoman]

This chapter is a bit of an angstapalooza. Gotta love the fellows pimping Wilson, though. Wait, that didn't come out quite right.

[flywoman]

This is going to sound a bit odd, but what I liked best about this chapter was Cameron's short appearance.

That doesn't sound odd at all. Cameron's character, at least with respect to her dynamic with House, really does evolve over the course of the series, and it's fun to write her once she starts behaving more as House's caring but critical colleague than as his student.

House 'remembers' the odd fact, such as quitting treatment when Wilson and Sam got together, but apparently nothing else.

Mea culpa. He doesn't remember this, actually. There must have been additional conversations with Wilson not shown.

The chapter is slightly too explanatory for my taste.

In the conversations, or the bit about House in his apartment?

My sense of balance says that a passage with Taub belongs somewhere in here.In theory, I agree. Taub would also have an interesting perspective on the failed marriage (although of course I didn't actually know about that when I wrote this piece). On the other hand, I still feel like Chase and Foreman are closer