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FAN FICTION POST: "Fool's Gold", one-shot (Pirates of the Caribbean)

May 31, 2007 01:17

Title: Fool's Gold
Author: Sara C. paintedponyxox@flowrs4ophelia)
Characters/Pairings: Jack/Elizabeth, Will
Rating: PG
Summary: They play their old games, but there is never a winner or a prize.
Notes: Post-AWE with spoilers.

( He is not here... )

potc fic & meta: mine, potc fic & meta, my fic, potc

Comments 30

lady_di75 May 31 2007, 20:31:54 UTC

Wow, I really liked this. Very touching... I love how the rhythm of your words just sounds like someone speaking sadly, with as much energy as they can muster, just going through the motions somehow.

flowrs4ophelia June 1 2007, 05:56:13 UTC

Thank you :)

tanith75 May 31 2007, 20:44:36 UTC

Wow. So well done. I loved Elizabeth and Jack's relationship in this. They seem to be soul mates, and their love for each other went above and beyond a romantic relationship.

The end just killed me.

"But somehow he knows. The child is his but not his, just as she was never anyone's. It is nobody's fault. A boy needs a father. As she feared, he grew to be like only one of them.

At least she never had to choose."

That was awesome. It all goes back to choice and the fact that Elizabeth was never given one. Or Will or Jack for that matter. It all seeemed to revolve around that damn touch of destiny.

I also like that you reffered to the boy as a prize. I kind of always felt that everyone but Jack saw Lizzie as a prize.

flowrs4ophelia June 1 2007, 06:01:09 UTC

Thank you very much!

alchemistc May 31 2007, 21:15:54 UTC

"It seems this is always how it is: each of them craving the same thing, but never drinking from the same bottle."

Beautiful. I loved that, because it is just such a perfect representation of them.

This was fabulous.

flowrs4ophelia June 1 2007, 06:03:49 UTC

This whole fic evolved from my idea for that one line, so it's definitely one of my favorite parts of it.

Thanks so much! :)

tangleofthorns May 31 2007, 22:36:13 UTC

This is really sad, which basically redeems the cliche ending of the movie for me. Well done you!

flowrs4ophelia June 1 2007, 06:04:34 UTC

Thanks!

gigabyteme June 1 2007, 03:51:37 UTC

A hero to look up to, who lets him look through his telescope and wear his hat,

Squee-worthy image right here! That is so adorable!

I loved it. And the ending made total sense. Of course, there has to be some father around, those ten years. Great job, dearie!! :-D

flowrs4ophelia June 1 2007, 06:05:30 UTC

Thank you! :D