FANFIC POST: "The Persistence of Gravity" Part 2/4 (Twilight)

[flowrs4ophelia]

Title: The Persistence of Gravity
[ Part I]
Author: Sara C. (paintedponyxox@flowrs4ophelia)
Characters & Pairings: Sam/Leah, some Sam/Emily
Rating: R (hard R for this part)
Summary: Everyone knows his father was a complete screw-up who hurt and abandoned everyone who needed him, but he tries very hard to be a good kid, a good student, a good friend and son. And he swears to

Comments

[ninety6tears]

So I couldn't really come up with a comment for your last chapter that wouldn't end up straying into what I knew would happen in THIS. CHAPTER. You're just going to slowly kill me with this, cause the more beautifully ordinary you paint this relationship, the more I'm reminded of how frikkin' DOOMED it is because of how Meyer's universe seems to continually punish everything that is intrinsically good with some manner of colossal mythic bitchslap. One of the most emotional things you conveyed so well in this chapter is how completely frightened and kind of inevitably alone Sam is as this starts to happen to him. I can't even begin to quote everything that made me go all melty and "aw, well, FUCK" at the same time in this...this...LOVE scene. YOU MADE THEM DO IT. WHAT KIND OF A SADIST ARE YOU?

[flowrs4ophelia]

Haha I'm so glad I changed my mind somewhat at the last moment about whether they'd ever actually have sex when I just realized "Holy shit, right now in this scene, there's absolutely NO way this would NOT happen between them RIGHT NOW and that is so totally disastrous in the most perfect way." LOL, why am I so evil? If I'd gone with my original intention of having them never doing it I can so see myself realizing this later after I'd already finished the whole fic and brutally kicking myself over it forever.

Thankssss dude. :)

[mhgood]

Yeah, they did it. Guh. It's so sad and yet so true to the story of them, you know? I mean, all the hurt, all the anger, all the sadness of the end wouldn't have been quite so bad if they'd never come together so completely. And for it to happen after he phased for the first time--priceless and so, so sad.

[flowrs4ophelia]

Yeah, those were my thoughts when I wrote it. :( And I must be some kind of masochist for getting myself into something so tragic, LOL.

Thanks the comment. :D

[beautyfrompain]

I freaking love you for writing this. Brilliantly heartbreaking, and you convey everything so well. Can't wait for the next installment!

[flowrs4ophelia]

Thanks so much. :)

[thirteencands]

Ugh, I know what's going to happen and it just makes the story more painful. They love each other so much and I just don't see Emily coming and ruining their relationship with a blink.Imprinting is seriously evil, how could someone write such nonsense, Smeyer, how ?!

Woah, I forgot that Sam had no one to guide him the very first time he phased. I felt incredibly bad for him, he was totally lost and he had no idea what was happening. If I were him, I would have gone mad.

[thirteencands]

No hard feelings towards Emily of course, it's not like it's Really her fault. Sort of =)

[flowrs4ophelia]

I know. :( Imprinting. Fuck it.

Thanks for reading. :)

[nade2008]

Ugh Sam Leah love kills me everytime....imprinting is a nasty bitch! =S
I'm so hooked on this story i love your writing style!