Comments | florilegia: Rape of the Lock

florilegia

Rape of the Lock

Mar 14, 2007 14:47

The story in 150 words or less exercise.

It is 1979. We sit together, the two of us, back to back. The stink emitting from our torture smells stronger than a laboratory recently drenched in formaldehyde. Wrapped in plastic garbage bags, I reach behind me to ascertain if my sister is still conscious. We have been sitting here for hours. A buzzer ( Read more... )

sociology, creative writing

Comments 7

joanofarchetype March 14 2007, 21:44:34 UTC

Wow. When I first started reading, it reminded me of "V for Vendetta" or whatever that Guy Fawkes movie was called.

You do know I'm getting my hair done Saturday, right? Now I'm scared.

Beautiful way of describing something as if it was something else.

florilegia March 14 2007, 22:25:27 UTC

The resemblance to V pleases me, but I wasn't trying for that.

YOu're not getting a permanent wave, so don't worry. There isn't anything quite as nasty as a permanent wave in the realm of beauty treatment, outside of plastic surgery. Which brings me to the question: do you think it is necessary to say something about me getting my hair curled while my sister was getting her hair straightened? Or does that point not matter so much?

joanofarchetype March 15 2007, 14:26:39 UTC

You could mention it in the explanation, if you like. It shows how it is always the most difficult to attain state that is considered most beautiful.

My favorite part is the pick in the torturer's hand.

Well done! gee_bee March 15 2007, 18:48:43 UTC

Oh my gosh, that was great! It horrified me first, and then made me laugh, mixed with a feeling of relief! You had me going there!

Re: Well done! florilegia March 15 2007, 18:54:06 UTC

Thanks so much. Need to see what you've been up to. Still have your DVD, which I must return mas pronto.

AK gee_bee March 15 2007, 18:53:16 UTC

Oh, one more thing, I'm a BIG Angelique Kidjo fan. I'm fortunate enough to have gotten to see her perform at the old Grand Emporium in KC years ago, and I got some great pics! I don't know if she'll ever play in a place that small again. Plus I got her to autograph all my CD covers. I have all her albums.

Re: AK florilegia March 15 2007, 18:55:44 UTC

I'm particular to Bahia (or whatever the Brazilian one is called). Impressed that you even know who she is--haven't met anyone else who has known! At least that they revealed in conversation...lol.