Comments | florahart: Birthday Fic #23: "Old Game" (Severus, Lucius; PG)

florahart

Birthday Fic #23: "Old Game" (Severus, Lucius; PG)

Apr 08, 2007 18:39

Title: Old Game
Characters: Severus, Lucius
Rating: PG?
Words: 840
A/N: This is the 23rd of the one-a-day birthday fics. Prompt from leni_jess Lucius/Severus, or just Lucius, Negotiation. I wrote a longer version of this, which goes on quite a bit further, but I'm pretty sure it's stronger ending here. Also, I assume that given Severus reportedly gets ( Read more... )

gen, lucius, snape, 37th birthday ficlets

Comments 9

leni_jess April 9 2007, 02:40:28 UTC

a traitor to the blood breeds outside their people.... The old families trust these children even less; they are born of treachery, in the dark, lacking the history and tradition that is their broken birthright.

Oh, interesting! When you say it like that, given the wizarding world's conservatism and fears, it seems inevitable that that's how it would be. I very much like the idea that Eileen would have known what her son would have to face, and would have worked to prepare him. Severus certainly would have learned!

Thank you for this glimpse of the young Severus, calculating and desirous - with no failures of judgement behind him yet.

Ah. leni_jess, and "a tapestry of his own".

florahart April 9 2007, 02:45:58 UTC

Thanks.

Own, I see the typo, and now I'm trying to figure out whether there seems to be a typo in your name. Hm.

leni_jess April 9 2007, 02:49:15 UTC

I think the typo is mine (sorry!) in converting html to text in a file on my hard drive, when I downloaded the fic.

mtnjoy April 9 2007, 03:00:31 UTC

Mother will understand, even as she fears for him. They are too alike for her to not see his intent, and while she may not believe he can thrive, or even survive, she will understand.

This is--wow. *thinks* Um, true. And heartbreaking.

florahart April 9 2007, 03:08:13 UTC

Thanks. :)

vimeslady April 9 2007, 03:04:18 UTC

That's one of the most interesting character portraits of young Snape that I've ever seen. It's lovely.

not only amplify his (many other physical

I don't think you want that open parenthesis there.

florahart April 9 2007, 03:08:46 UTC

Well, yeah I do, I just want it to close, too. Heh. *fixes*

Thanks.

anabellhenry April 10 2007, 00:03:06 UTC

Wonderful character sketch not only of Severus and Slytherin, but also of Lucius and, of course, Eileen.

He would do well, there.

Wonderful, indeed.

eeyore9990 April 22 2007, 00:30:03 UTC

Ah, fabulous. Gritty and satisfying and just... awesome.