Comments | flawsrevenge: fic: Change and Growth

flawsrevenge

fic: Change and Growth

Jun 28, 2008 15:49

He isn’t Jake.

When they first meet, it runs through her head that he has nice eyes, and good presence. He fills the room and she wants to like him right away. She wants to question him, and challenge him, and yes, follow him. She wants him to be the real deal.

It also runs through her head that he isn’t Jake. But then again, Jake isn’ ( Read more... )

birthdays, jericho, fic

Comments 6

wrldpossibility June 29 2008, 04:24:22 UTC

Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! Yay! This is a wonderful character study not only of Heather and Jake and Beck, but the town and the circumstances in history as well. I loved it.

There are so many great lines, but this was one of my favorites:

It takes her a while to figure it out, because even though the lights came back on it’s still been awhile since she’s noticed it.

It speaks of not only Beck but the entire community. And that last paragraph..gahh. Heather thinking of herself and what may be good for her is wonderful.

Thanks so much for writing this. I'm just so glad I saw it, because I'm on vacation and only checking sporatically!

flawsrevenge June 30 2008, 04:56:56 UTC

Honestly, I'm so glad this worked as a character study because my internet connection failed when I tried to re-watch Heather/Beck moments. And I'm even MORE glad that you liked it, because, well, it's for you. ;-) I really wish we had more Heather moments, and more Heather/Beck moments. Even though they're not my main ship, I really kind of adore them more and more in retrospect. So yeah, Happy Belated Birthday once again, and thanks for letting me write this for you.

I hope you're having a lovely vacation!

pbeeslysweater June 30 2008, 04:04:15 UTC

Yay Jericho fic (that I finally got an opportunity to read!) :-)
So good...as always.

Initially I read this line: "Beck could lose a hand" and thought..."shoot, now I feel bad for not beta-ing, she meant to say 'use a hand'...then I read it again and thought "hah, oh...right, it's so much better and artistic her way." *grins sheepishly*

I loved the bit about the kids grasping their parents hands with dark, hollow eyes...so sad and haunting...(then again perhaps I've been studying children too much)

Wahoo Jericho fic!

flawsrevenge June 30 2008, 04:48:57 UTC

Hey! You're not allowed to be reading fic; you're supposed to be studying! Just kidding, please to be taking a few breaks so as not to be losing your mind, k, thanks.

Also, wow, I guess I'm glad I didn't whine and wheedle you into a beta... ;-) Wouldn't it be funny if it WAS supposed to "use a hand" and I wrote "lose a hand" instead? Would there be psychobabble involved in that?

And yeah, those poor kids. *sniffle*

Oh and, um, thanks. :-)

happywriter06 June 30 2008, 16:23:41 UTC

I really like this.

Even with the power back on here in town, the world out there is still a kicked dog, lying in the corner and licking its wounds, snapping at anyone who tries to get to close.
I really love this line.

Like wrldpossibility said, an excellent characters study.

flawsrevenge July 1 2008, 17:15:18 UTC

I really enjoyed working on this--it seems like it's easier to do better work outside of one's comfort zone (i.e. Jake/Emily). Maybe because it's necessary to think more about the characters (and thus do a character study)? *shrug* Anyway, thanks a bunch; I'm glad you liked it!